by amanda30
...But confusing. There was at least once, maybe twice, where Lisa and Ella seemed to swap names in the narrative, and the use of "defiantly" where the word needed was "definitely" was jarring, pulling the reader out of the narrative. Spellcheck alone is not enough, most folks should make use of the volunteer editors just to prevent grammatical errors of this nature.
On the good side, you used names, rather than falling into the pronoun trap which makes other same-sex-sex stories so hard to read ("She kissed her on the mouth", etc).
I liked the story line and it is erotic, but there seems to be a mix up of names and it is hard to follow who is talking and when.
I really enjoyed this story but i was confused because if the top of the dressing rooms had a gap so you could talk to each other wouldnt other people using the dressing rooms hear Lisa and Ella.
I really like the topic, but can't keep up with who is talking! For future stories, please notify your audience of a new speaker by starting a new paragraph! I'm sorry to say I couldn't finish reading this one because of that...
I am busexual too and me and my friend Danica did almost the same exact thing last week. I tasted he cum and it was so sweet.
Omg i masturbate while readig this story. Im not lesbian but ive always wanted to try it out with a girl. It sounds really good!
well, idk if u can change stories on here but i know 4 a fact it was really confusing.. idk who wAs who..
its good but i did not no who was who but i cumed my girlfriend did to im a lesbian though my girlfriend used to be my bff since i was 7 but now shes my girlfriend
i am straight but lesbian porn and lesbian sex turns me on. i really wanna try it once
I am a straight girl, but lesbian porn turns me on so much. I can't even say how much I'm questioning my sexuality because I want to go down on a girl, and make her cum, and have her make me cum.
This was an aweesome story, that turned me on so much!
I'm straight but I've always had tat curiosity to make a girl cumm and I would eat it...I so wanna kiss a girl and have lesbian sex with her! I just need the right time!! Plus 1 time can't hurt anyone...
I'm bi and this reminds me of my girlfriend and our
Little adventures ;)
So this is how lesbians have sex.
Hehehe, I just need to figure out what Bellend means then I'll be an educated woman. (or maybe even teenage girl)
It turns me on makIng masterbation easier!!! Oh I am so fricken wett!!!!!
This reminds me of my girlfriend and I. Only we were camping when we first had our adventure.
Got me so wet. I thought I was straight, but now I think I might be bi. Really wanna have sex with a girl now.
Often dream about me and my best friend (I am not lesbian but Bi and my best friends body in a swimsuit is AMAZING!!)
yummmm plzzzzzz any girl free for me im a hot girl wid BIG tits and ready to sex and make ur pussy wettttttttt.........................
I'm so wet and playing with my pussy right now. So close to cumming
I am straight but have always found lesbian porn erotic. After reading this hugely erotic piece I am now not so sure of my sexuality because I have just cum several times whilst fantasizing about this and am now dreaming about how I can approach my best friend for similar action.
Made me incredibly wet! Love lesbian type stories and porn, it's so hot.. Thanks for the sexy story.. I need a friend to do this with!
So amazing like WTF... I want this to happen to me and my... Oh wait my girlfriend dumped me. Well, anyways, this was an amazing story. I want more..
Man I am so wet after reading that. I m actually rubbing my clit right now and reading the comments are making me even hornier. I really want to be ate out
So wet right now...I'm rubbing my clit and riding a dildo right now. This story got me so horny and these comments get me even more wet.
so f-ing wet right now. made myself cum multiple times during this story
I'm so wet I've been wanting someone to tie me down and make me cum multiple time..
That was really fucking hot. I wish that they could have used a dildo or something like that, but still...I am so wet from that. Mmm I like how you describe pussy. Love this story.
Your story is brilliant. Well thought out, nicely paced, and neatly detailed BUT BUT BUT it is let down by one omission. The omission of a spelling and grammar check; include that next time and you will achieve near perfection!