All Comments on 'Literotica: Feedback'

Feedback as lover

A different thought;

With some I've seen

Celibacy holds special appeal...

...in a solid poem. I feel it says a little too much though. Last two lines are so good, they would almost be enough.

Last two lines could stand alone.

it's ashame but true <grin.. what is ...is, we place our hearts out for others to read and some anonamouse comes along and bruises it while telling you they are toughening your thin skin while disecting your words unable to see your heart <grin... nice write.

poem, loved the line"bruise on pail flesh" .

wasn't me that left the comment - the Neurotic trail knows it too. As for the poem. There is a disconnect between the first set of lines and the second set. that would have to explained further. The last three lines would stand on their own, enough mystery.

anonamouse - aka 1201

I think that the two stanzas work well together and the poem works as a whole.

A lot said in only a few words.