All Comments on 'sand~~~'

Another big notch up

On the quality scale;

These grains of sand can be irritants

But from them come pearls of wisdom.

Okay, so what I said's a bit trite.

Enjoyed the read.

mentioned on today's reviews...I love your ideas here but, feel as I said you could take sand out of some of the lines ...imho...me choping.hugs/blue

great,

i think that the constant usage of the word sand reminds us of the poems purpose, reminds us that one day this is all we will be and to live each day as a sparkling pebble while we can!

again Arty,

i thought it was AMAZING!

Just in the first stanza alone, you could drop both mentions of sand. Readers will know what your standing in and what the sifting granules are.

And try to change about half of your gerunds.

Smile.