All Comments on 'Brother & Sister Beach Fun'

It's a good start but the sex part needs more detail, slow down a bit, especially there. We want to imagine and feel all the emotions and touching in our mind as we read, we want to be (him/her)! This story can go on though, a good love story, maybe even some preg, it's your story.

total waste of time it could have been good if it was either longer or had a second chapter to tell what happens when the parents come home and when college starts and after. as is a waste of time either finish it or delete it don't leave us hanging

it was a good story but you really didnt lead up to the sex part too much. And when you got there it was over too quick, try and slow it down give us more detail. like was it her friest time did he do it slow or fast. You know stuff like that.

That was way too fucking short for such a big build up. Very lazy.

i think it was to much build up for how short the sex was. otherwise great story

huh did it contain a sex scene? Must have missed it...

I see potential in this story. Sucks that the potential wasn’t used.