All Comments on 'Onyx Dreams Ch. 11'

Have now read all chapters and love it, a wonderful fairy story that does my heart good, Outstanding, waiting eagerly for the next chapter, all the characters come to life and I just know that the evil Erykia is going to get hers.

Keep up the good work.

Peter

This is just becomming 'emotional masturbation'. You are far more interested in 'plot', character development and trying to build a story. Unfortunately, you don't have the talent. Nor, I might add, is it worth reading past this chapter. It's sad, this is meant to be an erotic fiction site. There is little, or no erotica in this peice. I'd like to think that there will be, but I know that like so many other writers, you just are not that interested in it. It's like you don't want to write it. Sorry, you lose.

Since the section that this piece is posted in is called Science Fiction and Fantasy, I would assume that that is what goes here. Whether it's erotic or not depends on the author wishes. It's certainly not required.