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i lie awake

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by WickedEve01/29/06

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Pretty darn good. I can feel it in this one. It=pain, insanity, whatever.
Hey, great lines here:
f emotion was a gun
I'd use it on you
without hesitation

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by Anonymous01/29/06

OK

THIS is how you depict emotional pain. I really felt the hurt here.

Tess

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by Maria239401/30/06

hell yes!!

this is exactly how to poeticize emotional pain. This is my favorite part--

if emotion was a gun
I'd use it on you
without hesitation


I have a Glock, loaded with HOW could you's???? I fire it often, but it never hits the target. I hope yours does.

~~ maria

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by oregon_gal01/31/06

without a doubt

intense emotions here. "pull my heart like a pistol
fire a cold one into your guts
put you out of my misery..."
those words pulled up MY guts! WOW!!

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by Bill Dada02/02/06

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Great images, there is no doubt about how the intensity of the pain. I agree with everyone about the 'if emotions were a gun' line and I also really like:
'if blood were truth
we'd all fucking be Socrates'

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