All Comments on 'Scarlet's Web Part II'

Continuing the tale

Of the hazards involved

In the oldest profession - and bouncing back...

i like the story you are telling with this poem. i don't know if you're aiming for the more formal rhyme and metre scheme. if you are, you're getting closer. :) if you're not, then you might need to think about line breaks as this poem would work really well with slightly smoother reading.

my favourite line:

'shadows snored echoes of the rain's lone song'

love it when you tell stories through poetry... thus the Cherokee Rose series being in my favorites list...

it's something I'd never seen done before you did it...

and it is awesome... but i can't figure out how to make it work....YOU SURE CAN!!

Great Job as always Arty..

**HUGS**

~LB~