by chris 44
looks like Tina is in for a wild ride, can't wait to see what you come up with next, i do hope people realize this is a story...and not attack you for your thoughts/fantasies if in fact that is what they are or whatever...there is always another/different story to read if one doesn't care for this type...it is under the correct heading and those reading should keep that in mind...so do carry Sir...im going to keep reading and i do love what you've done with this chapter however i would like to see them be a bit longer...respectfully as always a fan in Texas naynay
This story kept me on the edge of my seat! I can't wait to read the next chapter, keep them coming!!
I'm really not a fan of straight up rape stories but this is brilliantly written, well thought out and much more complex than almost anything else I've found on Lit. Good work.
Keep going! It's so brutal and cruel and I cant believe how turned on I am!
or at least mangle it..he won't be doing that again
know where this is going to end up, but I have to say now that you have one helluva way with words -- and fantasy. It's so wonderful to find a writer that writes as fluently as you do -- so smooth, complex sentences and totally spot on punctuation. Finding your writing is truly a gift. Thanks...and hope you're well --
This is good, but it seems like the repetition is getting very excessive. In literature, versus essays and speeches, it is ok to stray from brief and concise. However, in a few sections of the story it seems like a merry-go-round of the same thoughts and descriptions. I think you need to de-fluff a bit. You do have a gift for writing and I enjoy this story immensely, but I recommend you try to avoid excessive repetition.