All Comments on 'The Set Up Ch. 02'

Paybacks and revengea are so fun, but they can get nasty. Usually you think that your payback and revenge are great, but don't turn your back.

assuming they have not wound up with STD or HIV. They seem to deserve each other.

Wheres the beef - this wasn't erotic - it wasn't arousing - it was about a bunch of fucked up people fucking each other up. The only character worth a possible shit was the ex-cop.

So again - where is the beef? - whats the mission? - to create a helpless and humiliated male???

And maybe Shala, who is now going to be seriously pissed.

called divorce reports ... and id show her the reports on her boyfriends also ...who would touch her ..probably have aids and all kinds of shit fucking with animals like that ...couldnt ever fuck her again with out wearing a rubber ...might as well get another one to fuck instead

I know you do as you please and have reach the culmination of this fuck them all and revenge story, but wow, I’d love to here about Elaine and him meeting that night. Two fucked up people who now have fuck others and what does love between them now mean.

I can’t even imagine what your mind might come up with, but would love to read it. I know write it myself, but I’m no writer and you are one hell of a writer.

Thanks you pervert. Great story!

to root for anyone here. Who's the good guy? Sure would like to be a fly on the wall for the confrontation though.

Come on JPB let's have a part 3

You have to write your own conclusion to this story. Bob will not finish it, he wants you to imagine it all. Thanks again Bob, I have already have it.

As always your writing has given us a lot to think about.

Keep them coming.

Charleybear

I mean a real snoozer

If this was a real life drama the marriage would be toast. Even though they were both cheating the fact is that the husband did not know his wife and as a result allowed a predator Shala into their lives.

BTW Readers: Send JPB an e-mail if you want to write a part 3.

SleeplessinMD

Sorry , boring , non sexual, racist clap trap.

a total waste. If you are really into IR you could try Africa. In many conutries blacks are still slaves, even to blacks. And to clear it up most of the people that populated the early US were not slave owners, they were debtors, indentured debtors (read that slaves), and slaves who were brought here by the French and Spanish mostly after having been brought here into the new world, not just the US, and saved from being killed by their fellow Africans.

What fucking planet do you live on? It certainly isn't Earth. can't you just once, just one time try to write something where just one, not all, not most, just one fucking person in your story behaves in a manner that just one of your readers could beleive that someone in the 5Billion plus people on this planet would behave... cause I've read many of your postings... and there just not erotic, they're not about loving spouses... they are just childish crap! Not once could I read your posting without thinking that you're a bad comedy writer.. the people are not real, so it is a WASTE OF TIME! Seriously Bob, you must know a few hundred, or a few thousand people in your life... has anyone even just once come close to doing anything as ridiculous as you write?

Keep up the good work!

You cut the story off just when it was getting interesting. I wanted to know Shala's reaction, her brothers' when the cops picked them up and Elaine's when she ran into her husband at Shala's house. You have quite the sense of humor Bob, sick but funny. Keep em coming

has a confusion factor. Its up to each to fathom out. TK U MLJ LV NV

I love getting even. Thanks for the read.

Some of the most fucked up people ever born live in this fucking tale of depravity and racism. In the end everyone involved loses. Fuck 'em.

HA

How these two stories got a rating above a 4. The plot sucked, the encounters sucked, that the wife fell for it so fast even with drugs sucked and the ending sucked. Should have just have everybody kill themselves.

She went from knowing he cheated as an excuse to have sex with a black guy, then being drugged for more and totally enjoyed herself.

Now - sober, she is going for more.

Big difference...she is now a BBC Whore, gang banger and an addict. Had she had the occasional and discreet fling, even black, okay but now...One More Paragraph Bob! You didn't just leave it open, you had him display a total indifference to the wife so........??????????????

When he gets there and finds his wife what's he going to say? THAT confrontation would have made a nice ending to this. As it sits, who knows what happens? He didn't seem too upset that his wife was a dumb, cheating slut (not a good combination). But I can't imagine he wants to stay married to her. Would have been nice to have either a few more paragraphs or another chapter for closure. But I know that isn't happening. Not with a JPB story. Done is done. Or some such BS.

Needs a conclusion.

not bad but could use another chapter

Could've been longer, felt like it was really rushed. Idk it could have been a lot better, felt like you just wanted to get this story out there and not care about the plot or ending at all.

Well most of your endings are pretty bad so I guess that's not any different.

Don't get even - get ahead. Well played. I see a divorce in his future.

Should have had sex with Shala before telling her about her brothers, that way he could have stuck it to her twice.

I figure someday he'll write a story that makes some sense. I wouldn't fuck her swamp infest cunt with bob's dick. After he found out, dump and go.

Have to agree with the dogg. As good as Bob can be he can also be this bad.

Too bad no sequel to describe what happens when he meets Elaine again, and dumps her.

of course another one with no real ending too bad you do pretty good

Any sort of consistency with the main character , he will meet his wife at elaine's. And let her know the fun is over. Probably have to confess to everything. And see if they go on. Otherwise, no need to go to Elaine's at all. Just let his wife find an empty house. Or be there when Elaine gets there. They are all three lying cheating scrum , so feel no sympathy for any of them. Maybe the wife a little until this happened.

...writes a pretty good story, but this one fails at the ending, just as quite a few of his others do. So in my opinion, a strong four fell to a weak two.

Like a lot of your stories, solid writing, mediocre cliche plot, and an ending that is not really an ending just an open ended cop out. You always know that worst you get with your work is some fairly well written shit, and on rare occasions, when you care to, an excellent read. Given your long track record, and obvious desire to tweak your readers that take all of this seriously, that isn't too bad.

Not a good way to end a good story.

The lack of an ending, makes me wish I never read this.

So what happened when he got to Shalas?.Also even though he is a cheat,did he dump Elaine for her behaviour?.I hope so.

This is a revenge story against Shala, and thus complete.

Note he protected his spouse by getting the tapes, so there's not a divorce story. They keep on stepping out on the other (with tacit permission.)

And that’s how JPB was conceived…after a gangbang of his slut mom by countless black men!!

JPB is a mulatto?

Needs a bit more.How did his wife react when he turned up at Shala's and how did Shala react to what he did to her brothers??