but if you choose to write more chapters on this story line (and i hope you do) please dont repeatedly put in every 4 sentences that he was with men and women i understand what bi~sexual means wether its a male or female using the expression. so other than that repeated phrase it was an awesome story n look forward to more of the Haitian's ventures of his new and exciting job.
I do agree with the comments above - it got extremely tedious being told how often he was bi ... how often he was 'the best' etc. Just let the story flow.
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it was good....
but if you choose to write more chapters on this story line (and i hope you do) please dont repeatedly put in every 4 sentences that he was with men and women i understand what bi~sexual means wether its a male or female using the expression. so other than that repeated phrase it was an awesome story n look forward to more of the Haitian's ventures of his new and exciting job.
I agree with "It Was Good" ...
I do agree with the comments above - it got extremely tedious being told how often he was bi ... how often he was 'the best' etc. Just let the story flow.
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