by WriterDom
is a comment with no substance but a high score
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Nice idea and setting. However, I can't help but feel your intent on descriptive phrases is off the mark. It almost seems as if you're trying re-invent the english language. your descriptive phrases are distracting from the texture of the poem. Almost making it feel like teflon more than silk. You need to use complimentive words and companion verbs and adverbs to create a flowing and fully textured poem.
sensuous, silky and makes me want to purr... do not at all agree with the commentator below - loved the unusual use of language to create touch and feel.
I absolutely love this. As much of your writing does, this gives me butterflies and a visual that is oh so real...