by Samuelx
NICE START WITH CHARACTER BACKGROUND. BUT YOU FORGOT WERE YOU WERE POSTING THIS. WITH NEXT TO NO SEX YOUR STORY WON'T GET THE HIGH MARKS YOU ARE AFTER POSTING HERE AT LITEROTICA. REMEMBER THIS FOR CHAPTER 2.
I think this is the good beginning and end to a story, but it feels like it's missing the middle. Good characters, but you just leave us hanging.