All Comments on 'One Beautiful Day'

Pretty short... if you wanna make a good one, lengthen them..

Short as hell. "We fucked all night then the next day she left and thats the end." lmao. Man you need to go into detail.

great start to what good have been a great hot story, but fizzles out to nothing.

It seemed like you got bored half way through writing this story. Good potential for a very erotic story though.

I gave you a 3 on this one and I almost never give 3's. I agree with all the other comments. Let your imagination run wild. What would you really do with her if you had the chance. Details, man, details. Don't give up try again.

how was that reluctant..???? i mean she was a sex slave basically, willing to do anything it wasnt unwilling at all..didnt even get me wet :/