All Comments on 'A Very Different Halloween Party'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
nice

great little story with a nice ring of truth, thanks

ErotFanErotFanover 9 years ago
Great idea but short on length

Would liked to have seen the story fleshed out a bit longer (pun intended). Could have added many more trysts and incidents to this plot idea.

The last statement seemed a bit confusing. "I better go find my husband"? Did you mean to imply Lori thought she'd been laid by someone else? Her chearcter hadn't been established well enough to tell if she was capable of makeing this joking inuendo.

You might think about revisiting this tale with more length. If your muse allows such.

PapaGolf414PapaGolf414over 2 years ago

Just a nice, easy-going story, with no-one hurt by the flashing and fleshing action. Longer would have been better, though.

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