by ivvin
HAs been mentioned on the New Story Review thread in the Author's Hangout Forum.
your story used no quote conversation, nor much conversation at all.
it had no present tense, was very historical.
it was a bit dull. you might want to look up the how to's here.
Huh, I thought your story was quite good. Could have done with a bit more detail, but none the less a good story.
I am interested to see what you write next...
I do think it belongs in Erotic Couplings instead of Romance. Romance has to do with love in my mind and the word was never implied by ether of them.
There were some very good helpful comments given. Keep writing as you have a flair that needs to be expressed.
Thank you for the entertainment.
After a long hectic day at work a man and woman bump into each other. After they share time together, culimating in a sweet erotic interlude. Well Written. Enjoyable!
I love it! Great writing skill and use of words! Two thumbs way up! Please write more!