All Comments on 'Unfolding Ch. 03'

absolutely awesome story - a redhead instead of the typical blonde, wonderful choice

So good and so real...I almost called for 'room service' at the end of your story.! whew!

I loved how he told her just what to do, how he led and guided her, and this line: "Tactical maneuvers," he murmured, looking over at me with a grin. "Reinforcing my supply lines." That was the best! Very, very, VERY hot sex!

wonderful story

Well, I didn't think it possible for you to top your Unfolding Ch. 02 story, but by God you did. To me, this is the epitome of well written erotica.

What can I/we do to get you to write some more?

But maybe Shawn should control Jack a bit by doning a strap-on and fucking jack up the ass ;-)

just read again, and I have to save bravo. Great tale.

you are a great story teller, the best!

Absolutely love your writing. Even though I'm not a red head, I can completely see myself and my husband in your story. What really clinches it in this scene is the "tactical maneuvers" line. My hubby is former military so it sounded so much like him. Can't wait for the kids to go grandma's now! Thank you so much.

you are the best writer in literotica

You are such a powerful writer! Oh, how I wish I had your talent.

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