by StrongMaster7
One must start somewhere. I say, start with you know or what your influences have been, then stick it out over the edge and go for it. Well done.
A few comments: 1.The "pool boy" or "lawn boy" or "gardener" is so over used it is almost a proverb. We remember "Lady Chatterly's Lover". 2.The setup and access of the "away husband of little interest and gone for a week" has also been used, I think, too much. If, however, one makes a different literary approach with certain words and unique phrasing, it can become something altogether different. 3.The changeover from "Mrs. Dolan" to "Mommy" was, to me, a bit startling, rushed and without sufficient transition; (a bit like too little foreplay.) A slower development with the interaction is what I would have looked for. I found your structure, though, excellent. I was also very impressed with the 'first person' narrative; Not too many authors have the guts to do this and they want things consistently in Third Person. Not too many writers can do that well. If the author can use 'First Person', pull the reader into it as directly interacting, rather than the 'voyuer' approach, that is really special; I think Maurice Girourdais intentionally searched for this style. In my eyes, you have IT. Keep them coming. And "Bravissimo!".
I want to be that Big Baby boy that would make my evening really incredible please keep those chapters cumming.
i always know when i am reading a good erotic story, & i don't like many, when i find myself getting lost in the story. When i forget i am sitting in my apt. & i find myself sitting on the living room floor with Your characters watching them perform Your words.
Yea this story have me cumming all over now.... what a think...I never come read something like this... its wonderfull just keep it up writer
I've read your other milk stories. I think this one needs a second chapter.
One very hot story...had potential. I gave it four stars, before I realized the year it was written in.
I will now note the year a story was written by you. You have been warned.
Hi, it's me, Strongmaster7. I am happy that so many people like this story. It is one of my goals as a male author to write stories that appeal to female readers. I appreciate getting comments from females readers, but most are anonymous, and I would welcome any PMs from ladies so that we could exchange a few ideas and I could improve the quality of the stories I write. (Yes, this is a transparent attempt to get contact with female Lit members.) :)
I thought this was a continuation of your other MOTHER's MILK series, i was looking forward to reading a continuation of that series.