All Comments on 'More of Mother's Milk'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
To me, a unique track. a little contived. liked it

One must start somewhere. I say, start with you know or what your influences have been, then stick it out over the edge and go for it. Well done.

A few comments: 1.The "pool boy" or "lawn boy" or "gardener" is so over used it is almost a proverb. We remember "Lady Chatterly's Lover". 2.The setup and access of the "away husband of little interest and gone for a week" has also been used, I think, too much. If, however, one makes a different literary approach with certain words and unique phrasing, it can become something altogether different. 3.The changeover from "Mrs. Dolan" to "Mommy" was, to me, a bit startling, rushed and without sufficient transition; (a bit like too little foreplay.) A slower development with the interaction is what I would have looked for. I found your structure, though, excellent. I was also very impressed with the 'first person' narrative; Not too many authors have the guts to do this and they want things consistently in Third Person. Not too many writers can do that well. If the author can use 'First Person', pull the reader into it as directly interacting, rather than the 'voyuer' approach, that is really special; I think Maurice Girourdais intentionally searched for this style. In my eyes, you have IT. Keep them coming. And "Bravissimo!".

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
Big Baby

I want to be that Big Baby boy that would make my evening really incredible please keep those chapters cumming.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
really hot!

my tits are throbbing!

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Getting Lost

i always know when i am reading a good erotic story, & i don't like many, when i find myself getting lost in the story. When i forget i am sitting in my apt. & i find myself sitting on the living room floor with Your characters watching them perform Your words.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
Hot, hot, hot!

Can't wait for sequel!

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Loved it

Damn fine story

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Hot hot hot as fire

Yea this story have me cumming all over now.... what a think...I never come read something like this... its wonderfull just keep it up writer

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
Fabulous

Amazing.. made me cum 3 times reading it !! (Rosie)

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Loved it but want more

I've read your other milk stories. I think this one needs a second chapter.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Pray tell....do you think waiting eight years is enuf?

One very hot story...had potential. I gave it four stars, before I realized the year it was written in.

I will now note the year a story was written by you. You have been warned.

StrongMaster7StrongMaster7over 9 years agoAuthor
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Hi, it's me, Strongmaster7. I am happy that so many people like this story. It is one of my goals as a male author to write stories that appeal to female readers. I appreciate getting comments from females readers, but most are anonymous, and I would welcome any PMs from ladies so that we could exchange a few ideas and I could improve the quality of the stories I write. (Yes, this is a transparent attempt to get contact with female Lit members.) :)

animal99animal99over 5 years ago

I thought this was a continuation of your other MOTHER's MILK series, i was looking forward to reading a continuation of that series.

Pjt2017Pjt201712 months ago

I love your stories.

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