All Comments on 'Part Time Job with Benefits'
by brckline
- 17 Comments
Anonymousalmost 18 years agoGood idea, but poorly concieved and sloppily written. Only the dumb ones will enjoy this because they won't notice, know better or care.
Anonymousalmost 18 years agothe Surgeon General has just come out, again, and said Second Hand Smoke is WORSE than it was previously assumed to be! lol
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"Let's sit down and talk, John." Tanya said as she led him to the picnic table.
As they sat she took another deep drag and put her cigarette out in the ashcan. At then end of her slow exhale she leaned in to kiss John gently on the lips with wisps of smoke still coming from her nose.
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Kissing someone with smoke COMING OUT OF THEIR NOSTRIL is total turn-off! Smokers are not "sophisticated;" they are just nervous!
To try to stop their nerves, which are going haywire, they put things in their mouth, blow toxic smoke out of of their mouth, or inhale such toxic into their lungs, stunning their nerves temporarily, until their nerves call upon them again, an hour or two later to repeat the silly cycle again, and again,,,
sparrowhawke50almost 18 years agoI guess I am one of the dumb ones because I enjoyed your story. Is it not ironic that the really rude critics are always anonymous? I guess they are intelligent but gutless. Toby Keith wrote a song about "The Critic" that would apply here. My lady and I read literotica for stories that turn us on and this one fit the bill. Thank you and please write more.
Anonymousalmost 18 years agoHi,
I enjoyed your story and I too love the authors you mentioned. I am a woman in her 50's who has not seen the need to shave in many years. My late husband loved it and the man I see now enjoys me in my natural state. I also smoke sometimes and have found my non smoking lover enjoys it as much as I do. Different strokes for .......... Ignore the rude people who have no name and please write more. pollyanne
Anonymousalmost 18 years agoWe liked your story very much. Don't listen to the critics who will not sign their names! My wife has not shaved her underarms in years and even though she quit smoking years ago, she sometimes smokes when we are with friends and I love for her to have just one more before we make love. Hooray for sexy women and those who write about them. Deb and Denny
davidwattsover 17 years agoThanks for the high praise and the mention, and thanks also for a well written story that is both interesting and erotic.
Anonymousover 17 years agoLove bushy armpits. Underarm hair alas is disappearing and Tanya I wish was a real woman
HoosierFriendalmost 13 years agoYour wonderful little story has been languishing here for five years waiting to be appropriately appreciated. I am so very glad that I found it. Sorry you have not contributed anything else since then and realize that you probably will not see this comment. I wish you well and hope you have enjoyed success writing for other markets.
BoldVultureover 12 years agoI just found this story and liked it a lot. I'll check back, hoping for another story.
Anonymousover 9 years agoI totally identified with Tanya. I'm married and not a smoker but I still identified with her feelings as she looked at the young man and realized that he was looking at her too. The kissing and touching was very realistic...I was captured by her feelings the whole time. encore769@yahoo.com
Anonymousalmost 7 years agoI read this story and was erect the entire time. Later my wife and I read it together and she stroked me off twice. Twice that quick hasn't happened in years. I read parts back to her and fingered her to a loud orgasm. Off to bed, and talked about the story and made love. Whew. Great story. I see it is old, I wish he had written more. I love underarm and pubic hair and a very few women who smoke turn me on. My wife smokes occasionally and I pictured Tanya as her. Hot story. We both loved it.
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