All Comments on 'Autumn and Spring'

by iqespresso

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champagne1982champagne1982almost 18 years ago
Good

You have a poem that's almost a song lyric and you tell a good story inside it. I enjoyed reading it.

My personal opinion is that a good editor could only help improve this poem for me as a reader or you could add it to the construction thread (literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?t=254058) at the Poetry Feedback and Discussion Forum on the Bulletin Boards here at Literotica.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
Delightful

read, it just flowed off my tongue. i loved it thanks for sharing

TT

duddle146duddle146about 17 years ago
Eternal Summer

Just a beautifully written group of verses with metaphors all about the May December Romances.

AmyfriendAmyfriendabout 17 years ago
What a great story..

it is that lies behind this fine poem..

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Barely Legal

I have read all your works and will read them again, and barely legal I am

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Awesome, just awesome

never had an older man and now I am wondering.

curiousgeorgettecuriousgeorgettealmost 14 years ago
Absolutely Beautiful!

I am a new writer and you inspire me. Thank you for sharing this with the world!

Mia MooreMia Mooreover 12 years ago

The poem is clinical, filled with statements,. There is very little for the imagination to grab hold of. I see a person making observations and they are not coming out very poetic. You can and have done so much better. This is a sad disappointment.

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