All Comments on 'Star-Crossed Lovers'

This will be good to teach my kids about birds & bees.

Hi Man Ray, I like the topic for this poem, but have a few things to comment on...

-The words 'weeping' and 'mourning' don't remind me of happiness or 'glee'.

-I have not heard of weeping willow trees being 'ornamental', so that gave me food for thought. To me if it were ornamental then it would have a special place on its own, however the photo you have used shows a tree trunk among many other tree trunks, as if it were not planted or grown in an ornamental-type place.

-I like the humour you've used.

Hope some of this makes sense to you.

wso

(I have not voted)

I am flattered that you visited the poem, read it and made time to offer your comments. Thank you! Perhaps to best understand my 'poetic licence/choice' of weeping willow and mourning, Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia might explain it better than I. I have always fancied a 'weeping willow' and the moaning cooOOoo-coo-coo-coo of a 'mourning dove' so juxtaposing the two seemed appealing.

I might as well cast my vote now :-)

Man Ray

that's why i love this place. i learn something new every day. *off to check out wikidoodle now* thank you!

wso

I dig the playfulness of the mint ways you title your poems. IB

Calls to mind, "If a fish and a bird fall in love, where will they make their nest?"

Mentioned in ‘New Poems Review’ 09/12/2006

I’m pleased that you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for your kind comments.

The trees whisper of the past, sharing secrets - lovely rendering and an illustration of the forest ~ so dark and deep.

An amusing look at the trees and the bees and the ways of nature.

Really liked it. Witty, too. Great start to a morning for me!(: <3, Lillian.

ended the discourse, TK U MLJ LV NV