All Comments on 'Business Ravishment'

this story needs a lot of work!

I don't know if this is your first attempt

at writing or not, but you need some editing

help and better dialog to say the least.

Your grammar reads like a bad chinese menu. I couldn't even stand to read to the end. Please, oh please, next time use an editor.

As the other to commentators stated your grammar could be better, but I suspect English may not be your first language. I say this because of your use of the word arse and km for distance. Your writing style was interesting, but more detail of how you felt and what it felt like being raped would of added to the story. Keep writing...

I'm glad to see she knew her place and took the fucking and didn't cry about it. All women should behave like that.

One other reader had it right. Adding more content as to how you felt about the rape would make for a better story. The two Anonymous in America readers are not very worldly. This writer's spelling and grammer are both perfect for someone from BRITAIN, where English originated by the way. "Arse, colour, centre and KM" as well as the grammer used are all Britsh. If anything I looked upon the story as if Samantha and her rapist were from a British company set up in Boston. She did say she graduated from Oxford University (In England guys). The writer's English is just fine. Add more details from the protaganist's mind Love, and you will be fine. Signed: Samanthajgt

because that guy's a bastard! Would serve him right in a sequel to get back a bit of his own...or maybe lose a bit.