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by Liar10/07/06

OMG, the she said the F-word(s) ;)

Alliteration ahoy. A fun read. :)

Lost me a few times in the middle, but it's a tough challence to restrain oneself in that way and still be eloquent and fully comprehensible.

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by LeBroz10/07/06

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OMG
Liar's got it right!
A slew of f-words
All over the place.
Now I really do need a drink
To loosen my tongue ~
And it's only 10 in the morning!

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by Anonymous10/19/06

It's beautiful

I can't remember a poem that has tackled birth in such a way. The poet packs a lot of punch into lines that could have just been a ditty, but in fact are so much more. She manages to tell a story and that in itself is an accomplishment. Hope to see more of this.

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by LeBroz02/15/08

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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 39,000 poems.



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by Gaia_Lorraine07/18/09

From the poet...

In the first verse I imagined the baby in the womb and the second verse the birth. Of all the words I have ever written this poem touches me.

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