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AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
great

hope to see more like this

lonewolf69lonewolf69over 17 years ago
BRAVO!!!

Fantastic story my friend,well written as well as a little comical too! Keep up the great work,hope to hear more from you soon!

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
down to earth story

Kept my interest throughout the story and still believe it happened in real life. You are good writers and keep up the great work. Look forward to reading another of your stories!

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
A great story

A great story mate well written and a very good read ..hope you have more along the same lines

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Great Work

Thanks again for another great story! I have read a lot of your work and have enjoyed all of them. Keep up the good work!

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Maybe I'm just weird

I enjoy incest stories but only the ones that show real love for each other. I don't like the mass orgies or forced sex. That kind of stuff grosses me out. I like romance between family members. Thanks for so many great stories.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Very nice

I enjoyed your story. I thought you let the story develop, and it showed true love between brother and sister. My sister died, and I still miss her. I am glad your brother and sister were able to work thru the hard times and come out with a nice ending. I wish you would write some additional chapters to this one. Thank you

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Loved it

That was great, It seems that you spent a lot of time on this. I have often thought about my sister.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Great story

Excellent story

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
It Brings Back Thoughts of My Sister

Excellent story. I was introduce to sex by my older sister. But it became more than just sex. Keep it up.

BlueEyedKittenBlueEyedKittenover 17 years ago
Sweet

Wonderful work. So often when I read incest stories I think about how the 2 people really should be together and you made it happen. :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Sorry only 5

I am sorry i can only give you a score of 5, I want to give you much more, this story has had me engrossed from start to end. Thank you

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Now, I Git It!

so they moved to be with aunt mabel in them Kentucky hills, too. ain't that sweet?

little allie jane sheperd's death --- and accident, what it was --- was hushed up, ain't that so?

ain't it sweet, y'all, that them folks down there and in arkansa and tennessee, there, too, had a certain such proclivity among first or second cousins!

attempts at jeff foxworthy black humor aside, the story is freakin' erotic, yes, dear author. thank you for the hard work..........

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Very nice

Brilliant!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Too Long...Therefore A Little Boring

Shorten your stories some.

PEATBOGPEATBOGover 17 years ago
Brilliant!!!

While incest isn't everybody's cup of tea, I found this to be delightfully sensuous tale of love. People fall in love and in some cases the only solution is incest. Sad as this may be, who are we to condemn these poor unfortunates to a life of loneliness? Yet another great tale Scouries, keep them cumming! Pete.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
What a story

One of the best stoies I have read on here, not the usual rush into bed story. Keep them coming

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
the crap coming out lately,you are godsend

look some people bitch when given a million dollars,they want cash but got a check.your stories are great and keep writing your stories your way.you're one of the better writer on this site,keep the stories coming.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Excellent Story

Story line was well put together, was easy to read and written as a conversation so that made it more personal. The little bits of humor added a nice touch.

This controversial topic of incest is difficult to write about and put the loving touch to it but you did an excellent job of it. It beats the voluptuous sister/stud brother concept of incest fantasy that is common on her.

Keep writing, your stories are all good reads.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Excellent

Outstanding! Keep up the good work.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Great

Excellent and very well done. Many feel the same.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Wish there was more!

Wonderful...nicely developed storytelling.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
fantastic:)

A really great story:) And the happy ending I absolutely love:) Jona

AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
love

I love yoour stories keep up the good work

AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
A beautiful story

One of the best incest stories I have read...and I haveread a lot! I loved the romantic build-up after theinitial hostility on her part. I was sorry when the story ended.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
hell yeah

Brilliant.

Yes, most stories on the site are simple and quick.

This was just the right length, with enough subtlety to keep the reader interested.

And the death of the husband was very well thought out, the siblings weren't immediately overjoyed that they could marry, it was real.

A damn fine story.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
Brill Absolutely

The story was absolutely brill! I loved it, romantic and sweet while not overly playing those facts. Tis amazing, keep up the good work.

ChristopherMartinChristopherMartinalmost 17 years ago
Good Job

Awesome story, very good and i have read 4 others all good and long lol all are a must read. Congrads on all your stories or shall i say on you work.

VandrenVandrenalmost 17 years ago
Needs Work

Fair story, though the plotting could use work. Now for some constructive criticism: 1) proofread, 2) don't overuse ellipses as you currently do, 3) the time transitions need work, 4) far too many cliches in the whole piece, 5) unbelievable characters - the narrator, for instance, starts out speaking like an Australian, then moves to the U.S.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
soso

the story was ok but a little unrealistic no normal guy would forgive his sister that easily most guys if forced to help a sister like that would have not washed her just brought her the watr and sponge and towel and left her alone he would not have slept in the same room either most guys hold a grudge forever especially in these circumstaces

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
Oldguy has his say.

"soso" and "most guys" my ass! I'm 64 and I think I can speak a little better for "most guys". This was a great read! And I have to say, since I'm a Nam Vet the "near"-last part of this was pretty tough to handle.

If you Really want Realism, go SHOOT somebody! You'll regret That forever. Obviously I assume you know I don't really suggest you do that, I'm just making a "True" point.

Jim is a great writer, especially for me, a guy who can't read a novel because of a faulty memory. But so far I've read 3 of his stories and I don't plan on switching writers anytime soon.

Thank you for listening, Fred_ *********

Jim might know me as sixgun000

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
Very good

I really enjoyed reading this : )

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
AMAZING

5,000,000,000/10 absolutely amazing story

Southernsweetie554Southernsweetie554over 16 years ago
Great story, but needs work

I really enjoyed this story. However, a few other readers suggested proofreading, and I would agree. The end ended up being very confusing- obviously one section was mistakenly added in where it didn't belong. At one point, Allie has given birth, but at the very end, she's still pregnant and getting married.

All in all, great story. I loved the characters, humor, and plot development. I also always enjoy a happy ending, no matter how confusing!

Ms.RotfeuerMs.Rotfeuerover 16 years ago
Exellent

Great job of not making the story trashy or the characters shallow, sex crazed, dysfunctional people. I love that it is written from Will's point of view. Very well done on washing scenes and tying up all the strings at the end. The only tiny detail that threw me was the spelling of "jacqui". Interesting. Oh, and I didn't find the sex overly graphic at all :)

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Long

I loved this story but it seemed a bit lengthy. All in all keep up the good work!

clive522clive522over 16 years ago
good but long

Good but way too long for me - I reckon story's on Literotica shouldnt be War & Peace, more like short storys which is what they are.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
ignore these guys

it wasnt too long at all it was perfect leading to a climax now 8 pages no action is too long u made it interesting the whole way thru it just u wrapped up the ending really fast but great story

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
excurare

Very Good! The backstories did add to the length, but were absolutely essential. One person's too long probably is another's too short. The important point is that you knew when to stop. I think much would be lost if this story continued.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
I could've done that!

A few years ago, I had a young female supervisor who hated me so much, she'd go out of her way to make me miserable.

one night, she got a flat tire going home. I knew there were no service stations open, so I reluctantly pulled in behind her. As I syarted towards her, the fear |I| might harm her took hold. She told me to leave; leave her alone. I told her " If your not going to help me, sit on the gaurd rail and shut up. She did, and when I finished, she appologized and I left.

From that day on, she went out of her way to make things better between us. Almost as in the story.

In the story, I agree with some who thought it was rushed to completion. It would have been nicer to have Will and Allie gone through the wedding and made love again. As they started their new life with a new lease. jim

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago

I thought ur story was just amazing. The way brother and sister hate each other but then that brother is forced to be around her. I think it took to long 4 them 2 fell in love and that the sis should've remembered a long time ago that she promised her bro she would marry him. I also think that the end could've been better like after the mother accepted them being 2gether. It was confusin when the sis had the baby at a birthday and then come that she aint even have the baby yet. Next time make the endin more understandin and better that after the mom accepts, they actually have the weddin and consimate their marriage as husband and wife!!!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
I'm in love...

With all of your stories. They are just so good. I don't usually read really long stories but yours are worth it :DD

Jena121Jena121over 16 years ago
Well.............................

Jim Scouries - looks like you've done it once again - another great story - and I notice that the disenters can't even spell properly - so ignore them - they don't really know what they are talking about - It was great

Onagerian SurmiseOnagerian Surmiseabout 16 years ago
Enjoyed the story very much.

I appreciate how the joy between them came out as the tale progressed. Nicely done.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
UNREALISTIC

stupid unrealistic story no guy that had that done to him would willingly go help his sister and if his mom forced him to he sure wouldn't be so nice to her hewould ignore her as much as possible bring her her food and leave do as little as possible for her he sure wouldn't bathe her he would call as many of her friends as he could to get them to help so he could get away from her and he sure wouldn't talk to her or go looking through picture albums reminesing

about the good old days before she fucked up his life people especially family do not forgive like that they hold a grude keep it realistic sounding this isn't sci-fi

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
very well written

as a man who has some incest fantasies, I can tell you that your stories in this particular field are some of the more well written ones that I have read.

You really know how to make your storie more of a love story than just a fuck story.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Didn't like the ending

I don't know why you always get the siblings married at the end of your story. I would like it if they just have a sexual relationship and not get married.

Shweta Parekh

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
LOVE...

...the ending, in fact, the complete story. I treasure brother/sister incest tales that end with deep love and marriage. HATE the ones that are macabre (death or abandonment, or unrealistically portrayed (foot-long dicks, large as a ball bat; 56 HHH mammary glands). You achieved the best combo, in IMHO. Please, more based on this genre. Thanks for the enjoyment.

Jim

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
great story

i've read two others like yours so far. they might have been yours as well..lol, i don't recall at the moment. however, i usually don't read the really long ones, but your was really an exception. wonderful dialogue that wasn't obvious or boring, i kept reading the whole way through. and yeah, thanks for not exaggerating the anatomy out with super huge tits and dicks and unrealistic orgasms.

great story, please continue writing, for whatever category, just keep writing, great stuff!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Thank you for your efforts

You're a helluva writer, Scouries. I read and re-read your stories. Really enjoy them. Many, many thanks!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Great Story

I loved your story and was very turned on as I read it. I like brother sister love stories where there truly is love and it's not just a matter of hormones. I had trouble with the sis being married and having her husband blown up, as I have some military friends and don't like to picture them hurt or killed in the line of duty. Also, I think that their mourning him was more a guilt/relief thing than actual mourning. (I do love it when a bro steals his sis away from someone who is not right for her.)

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Really well written

UNREALISTIC by anonymous is obviously an only child, nice story , keep them coming.

genealguygenealguyover 15 years ago
GOD!!!...

...what a tale! It brought me every aspect of brother-sister incest I would ever want; a bit of animosity, begrudging swing to affection, humorous younger brother, final complete cave-in to their love. Perfect! Wrap this and release the movie!

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Well written

Your writing is exemplary. If a sequel is to follow, plz consider an anal chapter. True love deserves it!

Best,

Al

Sugarland, Tx

sassyGirl1234sassyGirl1234about 15 years ago
Well done

Grast ork my friend keep it up

my broter would kill me me lol if he ever found out what thtos iv had about him

but well done

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
one of my favs

This is exactly my favorite types of story, incest, but with romance. you really showed the love between the characters.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Nice

I liked it. I think it was honest and believable.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
We decidedly approve

This is thoughly believable and well structured with the dialogue a good way of breaking barriers and creating the important communication between people in love but battling to get through the barriers of hurt and suspicion. My sister and I have both read it - we are great literotic fans. We also had to learn a new language and move countries, change her ID to our late Mom's maiden name, as well as her need to retrain as a teacher to carry on with our lives and what we now have. As siblings, born 18 months apart - she being older - we were thrown together at an early age by an awful accident where both parents and all but one grandparent was killed. We were brought up by a succession of foster parents most of whom who didn't understand our crazy sibling love: well our sort of relationship and knew we would marry each other from the time she was 12 and motivated to spend 10 years working towards that goal. Now, after 15 years, we live a normal life with three boys and a daughter and are far happier than we have ever been had we remained. Fortunately, Europe is a large warm and great conglomoration of big and small nations and therefore people and in this we can get on with our lives without worrying.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Awesome

Very good story!

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
No

This writing style didn't work for this story. The jumpyness broke things up too much and made it too unbelievable. There is no character developement or developement of the story, the animosity, the realization of attraction, and the cave in. Some how, it just happens. We are to just believe she would allow him to finger her ass the first time he "washes" her, with no complaining? No one washes inside their ass unless they are a germ freak. The whole sponge bath in bed thing just doesn't work. Who the hell sponge bathes in bed? A broken leg that cant have pressure on it...ever hear of a wheelchair? That's just a few examples of many that make this story fall apart. To those that think this sounds so realistic...spend some more time on this site. To the author...several other of your stories are very good...this one doesn't work.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Identity Theft is a serious issue

and I object strongly to using it in this story for whatever reason it is still criminal. didn't like you killing off her husband neither - the poor schmuck suffered enough - overall a nice idea but lacking

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
What I liked most...

...was your portral of the mother & the beautifully sneaky way she "...legalized..." her daughter's "...daughter...". ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL!

Chrissie39Chrissie39over 14 years ago
Another great story from this wonderful author

Well done Jim a great story full of suspence and intrigue, so real in it's, agony of loving some one who you shouldn't, and a great twist in the tail with mom coming to the rescue with a new identity.

A sensitive story with real feelings portrayed by two siblings thrown together again after a fallout, had me feeling very horny by the first page and positivly gagging for it by the end.

Thankyou for another great story

Chrissie39

AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago
Another great story, but ...

Everything was great, except that they're fucking while her husband is deployed. Is that necessary? It's not an uncommon plot element, but I'm not sure people appreciate how much it makes veterans feel taken advantage of for being idealistic enough to serve.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago
Holy god

If it were possible to give a rating of 10, I would have. Simply the best sibling story I've ever read. No exaggeration.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago
a great love story!!!!!!!!!!!!

i love your writing and this story is another great example!!!!! i keep digging through to find things i haven`t read at least twice. all the best and please more

ChucksSiteChucksSitealmost 14 years ago
I'm Not Sure How Best to Comment On This Story, But Here Goes....

First, I'm reading Jim's stories because I like to read about incest/taboo. To me, they are generally the most erotic and often have elements of love. Being an only child, I've not had the feelings about a close sibling, but have had similar ones about in-laws and even close neighbors, affairs that if begun would definitely be taboo. I liked this story, and enjoyed the sexual situations that allowed the action to proceed to real sex, lust, and, I suppose, love, although we didn't stay with the two of them to see if the love remained after the lust diminished. Some have said, not realistic, but who cares. These stories on this site are meant to titillate, not to portray real life. If it happens to be true, then that may or may not add to the enjoyment, but again, who cares? And, for those who complain about cheating on an away serviceman, having him conveniently die instead of having to add more unnecessary angst to the story, and criminally assume an other's identity, I say "lighten up." You are reading a type of story that honors incest-taboo acts in most places and illegal, too. What follows is to be expected. I have to admit that I briefly shed a tear at this point "And then on a cool, dusty, early January morning, in a small town seventy miles northeast of Baghdad, a young engineer's life was blown away even as he was working on the construction of a school that could have educated a generation of young Iraqis. His future and theirs both destroyed by some ignorant suicide bomber who thought he'd go to heaven for killing women and children and a poor, innocent American boy." Here the story touched on the realistic, the here and now, and the truth that man must still war against man, and people still die because people can't get along without desiring what others possess. In the story it was a gadget, a means to avoid the "Dear John" confrontation that was not needed to express the lust and conclusion of the main characters. But I still weep for those who volunteer their lives to keep my freedoms alive. I will likely remember this brave man far longer than I remember his wife and her brother, however, I read this story for the sex, and it was all I desired. I'm reading Scouries' stories from A to the last, so I'll be enjoying his style and his incest/taboo for a long time. Thanks for providing such good erotica.

Djxt354Djxt354almost 14 years ago
Amazing story

Please write more like this so we can all enjoy them.

shadow506shadow506almost 14 years ago
Simply the best...

sibling story on this site. A tale full of love, lust and a friendship renewed. The caring actions of a brother toward his loving and beautiful sister that developed into something more meaningful. A must read for anyone needing a renewed faith in the thoughts of love.

jupikejupikealmost 14 years ago

verry nice love story.thanks

RobertaDundeeRobertaDundeeover 13 years ago
Coming back to a lovely story

After reading your latest submission, I thought I would re-read one of your earlier ones.

I did not regret doing so!

It's a very enjoyable, gently erotic tale writen by a literate and talented author.

As for the criticisms in some of the earlier comments:

'It's too long' - It's under two pages! If you have the concentration level of a flea then perhaps you should stick to reading the comments in public toilets!

'The story doesn't make sense - timing is wrong at the end.' - Rubbish! The ending is not sequential but the chronology is perfectly correct. Re-read it and take notes if you must and you'll discover there's nothing whatsoever wrong. A good story does not require to be written for a 3 year old to understand - and if you're that mental or physical age you shouldn't be in here anyway!

'It needs better proofreading' - Ok, perhaps there are a couple of minor errors; but certainly fewer than in the first lines of the complainants' comments - lol. If you are going to write literary criticism, can I suggest that you at least have the decency to do so in language which, in some degree, approaches the standard of literacy that Jim exhibits on a consistent basis.

And yes, I know the last bit was rude but it does feel good to let off steam occasionally.

MacshvnfunMacshvnfunover 13 years ago
The second time around.

I had read this story once before. Really liked it then & loved it this time. It has such a nice comfortable flow to it. One of those stories that keep you going till you get to the end, while keeping you emotionally involved.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Great

Good, simple, horny read. Keep it going

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Excellent!

Another 5-Star from the great Scouries. My only complaint is that she didn't seem to resist much when he washed her for the first time and fingered her ass. Seems to me that a) he would've been more cautious, waited a few bathings before trying something like that, and b) unless she was already falling for him at that point, she probably would've at least put up some sort of resistance to having her ass fingered by her little brother.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Like fine wine!

Wine is an acquired taste. This story's genre is an acquired reading. Your writing, like fine wine, gets better with age but in this case, better with each work.

OneSilkyOneSilkyover 13 years ago
Wonderful!

A really great tale, spread out to make it tasty

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
brill

a story gentle and loving could read again and again keep up the good work

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Perfect Pacing

Like the other story of yours I read, I appreciate the pacing in your stories, Even though the males are perverts. You never jump straight to the sex. Keep up the good work.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Amazing.

Brilliant, absaloutely brilliant. I love the way You drug this one out yet, kept the sexual tension between them. Amazing.

Keep writing!

genealguygenealguyover 13 years ago
Mr. Scouries,

I am again mesmerized by your writing talents. This is one of my fave stories on Lit. The plot, the interaction between Allison and Will, the fun conversation combined to make this a great additi0on to the genre. Thanks Jim

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Another good one

Thanks Scouries for another great story. You're definitely one of the best authors on the Literotica, I'll be back for more.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
Neat Story!

I like your work - you write well and there's feeling in your work. Keep it up!

BobM

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
Sexy

That was a good story. I love how there was a happy ending..

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
Exceptional

I love Literotica, but Alison's Ankle is one of the best I've read.

The humor, teasing and love make it seem so real and I do love happy endings.

Please keep writing

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
well

minus 1 star for the cuckolding of a soldier, which is despicable, but still four stars for excellent storytelleng, and a well wrapped up ending. One other thing though: the sisters comment about it being "his fault" that she told everyone they knew about his...episode...with her clothing, could have been resolved better. I mean, by my calculations, the kid was fourteen. his big sister should've protectd him, not set out to ruin his life. Other than those two things (and the sister "fault" bit is more nit-picking than anything) it was an excellent tale. It seems you've stopped writing for now, but I look forward to further works, especially of this grammatical, and storytelling, quality.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
I've concluded the second story.

I read Allison's ankle tonight after concluding the Red headed lawyer story earlier. I have to say you have a flare for writing erotica all tho after reading these two stories I believe your gifted enough to write anything you'd care to write. I hope your continuing with the Doctor's stories with the Asian lady that was mentioned at the end of the red headed lawyer story? You have a way of writing that brings the people to life that your writing about. Keep up the great work looking forward to reading more of your work. Matter of fact I'm on to the next one right now. Thank you again, SR.

pg240pg240almost 13 years ago
Bravo

I certainly like that you include romance and humor in with the erotica. I love your stories. In this one, however, the parts of the dialog appear to have disappeared. Sentences just end abruptly. Another great story. Sexy and endearing. Thanks.

pg240pg240almost 13 years ago
Pondering a bit more ...

The more I thought about this story, the more I thought the sponge bathing could have progressed a little more slowly. Not sure he would have been so bold right away or that she'd let him be so bold right away. I know the story was long, but ... And I know that's nitpicking. I just usually come down on the side of plausible credibility, even in fiction. But you know I love your work!

CWR2014CWR2014over 12 years ago
Great Story

Again it's always a pleasure to read one of your stories. Thank You!!!!

toby9790toby9790over 12 years ago
WOW!!! GREAT STORY!!!

This is another great story. I love a story that has a happy ending. This was an amazing "love" story. Great job.5***** toby9790.

abby4u2abby4u2over 12 years ago
Never disappointed

When I am in "need" of some good erotica, I say to myself...

"ooooh go find a Scouries story". It always does the job for me! Your writing is for people who share certain kinks...and who are reasonably literate. Great job!

abby

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Another masterpiece from scouries!

Once again, you have written another masterpiece of erotica, scouries! Whoever you are, keep up the excellent writing! 5/5 stars this deserves and more... wish I could give it a bonus of 5 more!

- A fellow writer

IrfonIrfonover 12 years ago
Jim,lad...

...another Excellent story!!

Keep writing please ?

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
deeply upset

i am a prior marine who reads literotica on a daily basis and never has a story pissed me off so much. i understand that the story is fictional and is about romance. the cheating on the gaurdsman is so sickening. i have seen my friends come home from Iraq and Afghanistan in one piece only to have their hearts shattered by the woman the loved and trusted. if this woman was someone i knew i would have shot her and her brother. we in the military fight for your god-givin rights to think and act as you will, but to cheat on us? with some non-military fuck no less? i am incredibly steamed over this story.

redskinsfan6969redskinsfan6969about 12 years ago
very nice story

would love to rad what happens next

imurddyimurddyabout 12 years ago
Upset Marine

First, I want to thank you for your service. There's no greater American, than a soldier. But you said it well, its just a story about incest. What difference is there that her brother was non-military? Would it have made a difference to you if Johnnie had been a civilian contractor working in Falujah? The author could have had Johnnie come home and kill them both, or come home and become the third, somewhat smaller leg, of a love triangle. I actually laughed, when the author killed Johnnie, because it was the easy wAy out. Life is complicated, and wives cheat on their soldier husbands. If they didn't, our drill sergeants wouldn't have told us that, "Jody's got your girl," in basic training. Hell, we sang it while marching in cadence. So, don't get angry, if this story hits a little too close to reality. Just like the disclaimer says, "Any resemblance to life is purely coincidental, and all the videotapes have been destroyed."

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
kool

I like this one alot ....sound real like it really happened

bedmackbedmackabout 12 years ago
Very Good

I really enjoyed this story. I hope you keep writing.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago

Wonderful story, made even better by the fact that it was a dickless soldier's wife taken from him (and eventually his life too)

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