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The Road to Hondo

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous10/21/06

You have

some beautiful images here, but a little bit bogged down with extra words. If you were to carve a little closer, you'd have, for example

The moon ascended a wooden fence
and stepped up through power lines
like a musical note rising scale
beginning the night's long, silent song.

which is gorgeous. There is a lot here to commend, Art. Keep up the writing. This longs for editing, though, to let its light shine.

This poem was mentioned in New Poems Reviews. C.o.S.

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by LeBroz10/24/06

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Another of Art's classic Texas tales
Complete in one telling
On the road to Hondo...

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