by Lucky Mann
A pretty fair plot, but it could have been so much better if you had edited out some very tiny mistakes. They seemed to stop me dead in my tracks as I read on.
I wish you had explained how she got there on her own and how she knew to be a passenger in your car.
I don't mean to be so picky, but it did distract from the story a little and instead of being a great story, it was just a good story.
But thanks anyway and good luck in the future.
Would have been nice to know the story is about rape/blackmail before I started reading it.
And since it seems like the blackmailer continues to be the focus of the story I seriously doubt he ends up with his balls removed like they should be.