All Comments on 'Ostinato'

Very nicely done

With phrasing inviting rereading;

Very smooth and effortless.

I enjoyed this except for a very minor criticism of the first stanza which didnt quite have the rhythmn of the remainder - which considering the title??

You're the first modest smart-ass (mock American accent) I know. I enjoy your literate games.

I think Ishtat has a point though.

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Having the erotic activities describe in verse is ever so much more appealing than describing it in prose. Well Written! Brilliantly Crafted!

is a apt discription of this alluring piece...blue

the beloved reprise

of a not so subtle theme

now ligatto, now piano

I rest between rests

finding a place to place my head

and not get a cramp in my hand

in honor of a tune I love so well

With the Ostinsto segment I was vibrating! That was one powerful fuser you got here!

I would advise considering some variations to the “constant, rhythmic pattern” if you wish to maintain similar fusing power in your future together…

'It is a constant, rhythmic pattern...that bears repeating

and repeating endlessly' I'll dance to that.

of the context to the form

And melts in the mouth. Sweet O