Raw and sweet. Thank you for that, Selena.
Heartwrenching, but so realistic. I'm sure that, at times, it ends just like this - holding each other - not knowing what to do or what the future will be. Excellent writing, well done - and I still feel their pain.
YES, a man wrote this story the wife or lover or both would have paid for her cheating. Find out who the man was and if he's married tell his wife so he can suffer too. Don't let him get awya with it. How many other times has she fucked someone else? How many? No mention of that! No a woman wrote this. No man would take his just freshly fucked wife and hold her and love her knowing her pussy was just fucked by another cock. I can't believe how you ended this story. Love is great but it dies with cheating and infidelity like this woman did to her husband. Why not talk at least a few times about her lonily existance. At least talk to him before she cheats. He didn't relaize or understand her problem since she never told him. Oh he was at workl so I'll fuck this man. Na, it's because he worked and wasn't ready to go to Disneyworld and all the rest of the shit that happens to everyone married for as long as they have been. But the vast majority of the real women in this world love their husband and understamnd what a bitch fucked up dog eat dog money hungry bastard of a world we work in. This bitch just felt sorry for herself and she needed something else so goes out and fucks another man in their married bed yet! The husband should have beat the living shit out of the lover and kicked the whore wife out.He would have felt mush better. Then let her have to work hard and long to pay her bills and see and understand why he wanted to stay home. I'm sure they went places during their marriage. One year he didn't want to go and she fucks a new man she just met in a class. WTF he should have had revenge.
Somehow it's possible to feel empathy and compassion for all the characters in this so true to life story. Molly overcome by all the daily boring tasks seeks escape ~ if even for a little while. Good Write! Interesting Read!
I hated the story, but I believed the characters. You made them human.
why you write this crap? i don't blame the lover for saying i call you later.he fucks your wife in your bed and you look stupid and act stupid.the wife new all you were was a bag of air,talk and talk.
Despite some of the other comments, this is very believable. Not every man will fly into a violent rage, many will feel the obvious sadness and hopelessness he feels here. And many women, or men for that matter who get caught, will face the reality of the fact that they never did think.
What you have left is a couple who don't know where they are going, to divorce court, counselling or just getting back together.
What I would like is a follow up, to see how they deal with the considerable anguish they obviously feel
Good Writing but story realy sucked. You made the husband into a spineless wimp. He should have thrown them both out then get revenge by finding out who he was and destroying his life as well.Once a cheat always a cheat weather its male or female.
Superb writing as always from one of Literotica's very best.
The author's skill is consummate as she shows us who Molly and Jim are by their words, their deeds and their feelings. They're careworn, struggling against life's demands, desperate to escape the ennui of the mundane, hoping against hope for a brilliance, maybe just one moment of joy but knowing that will not happen.
It's not a feel good story. Prince Charming isn't about to swoop down and rescue the fair maiden. The cavalry isn't going to arrive in time. Nor is Dudley Doright about to put in an appearance. It's just two people who're together but don't know why any more. The marriage isn't strong, the bonds eroded away by the vissitudes of time. They're trapped in a loveless relationship that neither knows how to escape. It's poignant and it's played out every day in real life, millions of times every day.
Excellent fiction this is. This 100's for you, SelenaKittyn, for a story very well-told. I thank you.
it looks like its allways the same. I had a girlfriend who told me one time, she believes god made her to communicate. it was really fun. the problem was she was unable to communicate when we or she had a problem. even if asked , she never answered. it was allways "oh nothing". so you really should come out of stoneage woman. god gave you a mouth to talk not only about the weather , shoes and gossip
A lot of readers are only after the vengence. Your story was real. Does a man just beat the shit out of a guy fucking his wife and divorce her. That man lets his anger make a hole he covers himself in. The story was real because a man that loved his wife feels just like he did...what the fuck...
The wife tried to turn it all around and make her weakness because of him...Would really love to read what happens next...Your story was poignant...
Sad & wimpy story.
I wanted him to kill the guy and punish his wife by slapping her around.....but then I imagined it was me that just caught my wife and my brother doing this and........
of the categories i don't like. And I have to agree with most of the commentors here that this was superbly written. The story was sad, which doesn't bother me much because I feel that some stories just don't rate happy endings.
What I've been finding recently though, with what you write is the fact that you don't finish a story. You tell it to a point and then bam, you're done but you leave your readers wondering what happens next. That might be okay sometime, but not having an ending is sort of like not having an orgasm during sex. Sex is great, but it didn't do much for me.
I've read some of your stories that have just absolutely floored me, some were so wonderful and breathtaking that I couldn't stop reading, but it's like now, you write the least amount you have to to fit the guidelines and then, bam, you're done, deal with it.
I hope you take this criticism as it's meant. Constructively. Thanks for writing, your work is always entertaining no matter the ending.
You left your two people with no future, no past and nothing but heart rending sorrow.
This was a story leaving your characters, and in a certain manner your readers, with unending pain and no chance of relieving it. I don't think that was really what you intended.
of the lover he catches with his wife that's true but he sure as hell wouldn't just roll over and accept it like this man did in the story. And for the wife, to try and blame him for her infidelity is just pure crap with a capital C. This marriage would have been over in the majority of the cases. Only a wimp cuckold or sad excuse for a man would accept it like this husband did. Sad but no wife would do that to her man if she loved him and no man would accept her back as easily as he did it if she did.
For anyone who said this is a story about a wimpy husband, you're nothing but an insipid moron. No man is completely invincible, and Jim's reaction to what had happened was as real as it can get. Normally, wimp-husband stories lead to the hubby watching his wife being screwed and maybe even jerking to it, but that didn't happen here. It was a beautiful story, very nicely written. It was nice to see a character who had a real reaction to a situation for once. So, Selena, don't listen to anyone who said 'more violence' this story was perfect.
we confuse our emotions with the caliber of the story. This made me sad, so it deserves a bad score? I think not. It made me feel strong emotions and allowed me to understand the husband's agony. This is a very good story in a very tough category! (It's a great idea to use a song for inspiration!)
Too many years with the lack of communication finally took its toll. Don't know what's left for this couple.
Sorry, but despite the poetic and sensitive depiction of emotions and the use of rich language and imagery (akin to poetry), at the core I could not buy the emotions conveyed by either husband’s or wife’s characters.
The timing of exposed betrayal is the least likely to create negotiation of the relationships or renewed intimacy. The range of emotions: shock; rage; numbness; denial pretty much cover what you find at that stage (if there is no physical violence). The least likely are negotiation or renewed intimacy. At least I have not seen any in my work with couples for that stage.
Hopefully it indicates that the talented author have not experienced a similar situation herself.
Again, well written, but I don't believe the characters. The heat of the moment when catching your wife in your bed with her lover may not always lead to a killing (many times it does) but his stepping aside is totally unbelievable. And his holding her and trying to figure out what to do may have come later on, but not while she still was naked from fucking this character.......have you ever even known a man?The timing of the husbands actions is what makes him a wimp, not what he does. At that moment, holding her (except to squeeze the life from her whoring body) would be the last thing on his mind. To be honest, the song makes me angry and so does your story......
It's a very beautiful story and so very true you have here, Selena. Sometimes the pain is all that's holding two people together and sometimes it's also enough to rebuild a life on.
As always, you've written a very 'hard' story and made it something more than just 'cheating'; you've made it a story about life and love.
Kudos to you.
it needs emotion ...this story has no realness...he should do something ...first thing is he really should have shoved the asshole through the wall ... then the assholeness after him ....no matter as long as they have been married ...maybe they can get back but only after he has had his affair .. or 2 or 3 ...whatever it takes to see if someone else is as good as his wife once was ...thing is how can you ever trust her again ...how could you even fuck her not knowing if she has aids or something ....better off t odump her and live your life ...seems like she dont need you or you her so why not just commit mutual suicide
It's beautifully written and very sad.
My thoughts about the angry readers who thought the story sucked is that it simply didn't go the way they like it to go: with an angry, revenge-driven husband and a weeping, guilty wife. Hey guys--there are plenty of those stories, but this one is something different, OK?
But I'm not sure I agree with the Troubador, though I share his admiration for the story. He said: " This was a story leaving your characters, and in a certain manner your readers, with unending pain and no chance of relieving it. I don't think that was really what you intended."
My guess is that it IS what you intended. We can imagine various futures for this couple, but each of them will involve a lot of pain.
If the Troubador is right, and that's not what you aimed for, I hope you'll write a sequel to let us know what Jim and Molly go through after this painful confrontation.
Thanks again for your great story--ohio
I shuddered a little on seeing my favourite author rowing her small dinghy through the choppy waters of ‘Loving Wives’ however, as usual, you steered a good course and produced another fine work of art. Consequences are for another time, another place I just wallowed in the emotions and good writing.
My best wishes
The way you weave a story is fine, but ending it with so much unresolved is like
I am sorry, your story didn't make any sense at all.
How could any man hug and hold his wife right after catching her in bed with another man? Makes no sense at all.
You just WASTED my time!!! Quit, if this is typical!
The story made very little sense.
When I read the teaser I thought, "Just another 'found my wife screwing when I got home early' story".
Well, I was wrong - even most of those, even where the hubby joins in, have some point, some conclusion or some outcome.
I heartily agree with the woman who says:
"How could any man hug and hold his wife right after catching her in bed with another man? Makes no sense at all."
I add my vote to that in buckets!
I suppose many males these days could, but I doubt a man would.
If there was a point to this story, I completely missed it - as did many others judging by the comments.
We even have the king of "Reconciliation At Any Cost" bleeting that commenters downgrade a story because it doesn't end the way they'd like it to. Sounds to me sorta like a certain someone praising every reconciliation ever concocted on literotica no matter how far fetched or stupid it is.
I can accept any ending that is justified by the author.
But this story was really special - a stereotyed beginning, a pointless middle and no real ending.
Very well written, but even so, well written words about nothing still mean nothing.
Been there done that many years ago. You hit the nail right on the head. You brought all the pain and fellings right back as if it was yesterday or as if you Been there done that!!!!
they were so stupid he catches her fucking the guy in there bed and he saysd nothing there so stupid he needs a swift kick in the back end for not getting even with her why dont he get even with her by fucking some woman and bring her to there bed in front of the wife.
I liked the story because it got me thinking about marriage and life in general.
Anyone can write the simple and obvious. I was left with all sorts of thoughts that I am able to complete or simply continue to wonder about. I am in my 50's and have the ability to take a broader look at things from my experiences. I suspect younger people may only see whats in front of them and thus the negative comments due to a lack of a straight forward ending.
We watch T.V. and we read the newspaper and learn all about the bad things that are going on in the world today.We need to do this to grow and try to improve both ourselves and the world.Most of us read fiction to relax and unwind from our everyday jobs and the stress of our famlies,friends and our life in general.This story is not what fiction is all about.We all know we are going to die sooner or later,but we dont need to be remined about it all the time.Cheating is cheating and must be faced.The author wrote a sad story that realy said very little and didnt finish.I guess the question that every husband of wife must consider,AM I better off with them or without them.
Without reading the other comments: It was moving but felt choreographed, it was well written but to a script, it was emotional as intended but left me nothing but discomfort, it was pointed but not in the reasonable reality of human direction, it was unfinished, unexplained, unreal, unresolved and unsatisfying - as you intended.
And that's what hurt - the most. Intended Anguish isn't well meant for any reason, song or story. So I wonder why - why you?
Why are you your own chosen messenger of unavoidable anguish - just because you can? Hardly a plus to your portfolio
This is certainly the way a woman would like to have such an episode play out. A man --- not a wimp --- would have a very different view, love notwithstanding.
there are not enough low values to give you for this awful pointless WIMP story.
Does anyone know why she cheated? she didnt know where she was? or who she was?
Troubador Alavron 53 and Ohio... the Holy trinty of super wimp men.
doesnt that say it all? and the author is a woman which explains why those three liked this wretched story
Ok so he said NO to disneyword trip? THAT is a reason to cheat? clearly that was symptomatic of a bigger issue but one left unresolved. has she been fucking someone else?... for how long?
why would this wimp hubby WANT to O Hold a whore wife he has just discovered fucking some guy ?? YEEEEECCCHHHHH!!!!
so he worked a lot?....welll was he he sexually negelectful of her?
how many other men ?
That seem to be the eternal question in the loving wife section. Most of the peaple that write very strongly about wimps seem to just be very imature. They do not have a real attachment to reality and real relationships. Every man is different and react differently to these circumstances. Some usually say that the husband should kill or maim the guy fucking their wife and also punish the wife accordingly. Well, that sometimes happen in real life and guess what happens. The husband is often sent to jail. As the husband he would be the prime suspect and cops aren't stupid.
Some say the husband in the story is a wimp because he hold his wife and forgives her. I did not read that he have forgiven her. He are lost. It is not wimpy to act human. He are just shell shocked and it may lead to a divorce. Or they patch up the marriage. Who knows? I doubt that even the author know the outcome. Whatever the case i hope they find some happiness.
the first time I read it. I had a hard time beleving I could dislike a story so much. So I read it again, and this time felt pissed off. But I also felt and odd nagging that I missed the point. So I read it again, this time it meant something to me. To me, is was about them as a whole, not just him or her. I also saw two people running on cruise control, not minding the road. Just because the marriage is running without input doesn't mean you can sit in the back seat, you have to pay attention to the road or you are going to crash like these two did. It was still a painful read, especially three times, but I don't see it as pointless as others do. LYG
No depth of history to any of this. It has its merits, but this is crying out for further elaboration.
The quality of your writing is truly among the best I've read on these boards. It's poignant and evocative and true. (Also there were no really annoyingly stupid spelling or grammatical errors!)
However, I did feel that the end was anticlimactic -- what happens? WHY did she cheat -- that was never fully explained, IMO.
I would strongly urge you to do a second draft of this story, pulling out the ending to a more satisfying conclusion. I can understand why a man would forgive his wife but not without more explication.
Good job, just keep going!
The good parts of this story were the raw emotional impact of the couple as well as the obvious pain of the situation.
Another good part was the open nature of the ending which allows readers to plot their own ends to this sad tale.
The bad parts of this story were
(1) What caused her cheating? Was it the need for something different in her life? It read like the affair was a result of her need to connect with another adult (her lover's price for this connection was that she fuck him).
(2) The wife had no remorse for her actions so this marriage had been dead prior to this incident. The fact that she had her lover fucking her up to an hour before his arrival indicated that she was not concerned about him discovering her cheating. She was also listening for his arrival (not a good endorsement for her lover's efforts).
(3) The open ending raise questions whether they will survive as a couple. They had survived miscarriages, an ill child requiring special care and his temper. The marriage reminds me of a dry husk - just a shell with nothing of any value inside. The husband is not a wimp because we do not know what he values. Obviously he values work but he seems to be also on autopilot. The wife blames him for her cheating and he is confused and lost.
That was so lacking motivation it barely qualifies as a story. Why release something so unfinished? You're demonstratably capable of better, Selena.
Gosh, I just don't know how to thank you, Harry, for putting me in the same Holy Trinity as Troubador and ohio, two of my favorite authors on Literotica. I dunno if they're wimpy guys or not but I sorta doubt it.
How does a wimp live, Harry? You'll need to instruct me since I don't know anything about the subject. I reckon you're an expert since you talk about it all the time.
I gotta run. My new story entitled "Refugee" got published today and I should go read it to see if it qualifies me for the Super Wimp Hall of Fame that you're opening up next week. I know that was s'posed to be a secret so forgive me for blabbing it around.
Take care, Harry.
You have here a good introduction to a story or at best a man lost in his wife's infidelity. Someone wrote here this is how a woman would like it to play out and my comment is no this is how a cheating slut would like it to play out.
All I do is work in the house all day and prepare meals and shop and take classes and such. My god such an awful life, a virtual slave to her family preparing foods her husband doesnt like and she knows it.
Women forget that when they say this the man says yes all I do every day is go to the same job doing the same things day after day for about forty years so you and the kids can have a life in a home with food, clothes, and school.
Now remind me again who is the slave to the family.
Would be very nice if you could develop this story and find a wife who has some remorse for what she has done and ruining her husbands life, yes his life. She didnt really ruin her own, it was her choice to do what she did and commit the acts of adultry. In some societies, she would be taken out by her family, not her husband, and stoned to death for that act against her husband and god.
If I was disappointed in anything…it was the stories brevity. I would have enjoyed seeing how your characters ended up going about wrangling and muddling through this mess.
For those focusing on the anger the superficial issue of hurt pride, I would suggest that they take a step back and reconsider the reality of such situations.
What should a man (or woman for that matter) do? Walk away from their homes and children and everything else they’ve struggled to become vested in…for the long term…for the term of what they believed was their entire life?
Would turning in anger and pride, walking out to never be seen again…making a life changing decisions in that very moment of discovery…a decisions that will affect the lives of all around them…children, friends, extended family, living parents…every one held dear…from that moment forward…would that have made him more of a man? Is that what you all call being macho?
This little story simply helps demonstrate the reality of the human condition. We don’t stop loving in a heart beat nor do we forgive and forget in that time frame either…but what we often do…those of use that accept the responsibility of being adults…we work to find a way…a way to make it work…before running from the problem.
To do this does not make a man or woman a wimp or pathetic cuckold. It shows great strength of will and character…and a willingness of at least one of the two persons in the relationship…to accept responsibility for what’s now going to happen and for being the adult.
Good story. Keep it up.
Very well written I might add! A very powerful emotional slice of life's moments from a women’s perspective. Obviously she has no respect for him, which is why she cheated. Predictably he let's her lover walk away with a few empty threats, then shows some tit, he comes crawling back. (I'll bet hubby will be having some creampie for desert) The fact that this story is so well written only makes the husbands behavior much more disturbing, and knowing she doesn't regret what she did but only that she got caught adds to that sort of sick gut feeling I get when evil wins.
You did it. You captured it in words. The pain, the confusion, the love that just won't die - no matter how much you will it to. It's all there.
I love the song, always have, but the images that will play in my head when I hear it now will be yours, not mine.
Beautiful work, hon. Just... wow. ~Minx
the slut wife fucked some other dick because they didn't go to Disney World. Wow !! That is so not believable. It pretty much sucked.
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