All Comments on 'Andie in Wonderland'

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Dull

I agree its kind of boring.

That’s how erotic stories should be. Unfortunately, many readers are desensitized by tired repeated lists of body parts combined with sex related verbs - all mistakenly confused with erotic writing.

I love your literary references. I love the humor. But mostly, I like the irreverence and the casual fun approach to sex; no heavy duty machismo; no hypocritical abiding to self censoring (see the story about four sisters...);How refreshing.

I would say though that it seems that this writing comes fairly easy to you (I may be wrong on this one). Some of the erotic encounters; dialogues could benefit from more details, slower pace. How about it for your next submission?

Andie in Wonderland is a main character one would really enjoy meeting and getting to know in real life. Sexy, witty and a little risque ~ it's no wonder the Uncle finds her attractive.

Beautifully well written. Delightful Read!