by rob99202
It was a good story. Sexy and delicious.
I would strongly recommend having an editor read over your next stories. There were a number of spelling & grammar errors, plus there was a Point of View shift in the middle. During that Point of View shift, the focus changed from narrating the characters in a "global" way to, instead, briefly switching into Georgia's POV, then Tammy's POV ("..as she drives in the front seat, Tammy adjusts..."), in the "present". I think you'll get my point, once you read the sentences around that area :-)
Other than that.. twas quite yum! :-)