All Comments on 'Naughty Thoughts'

My biggest objection is to the shortage of punctuation;

Try semicolons, periods, or even break it into at least a couple of stanzas. Would make the reader's job much easier, instead of trying to figure out how you meant for it to be.

You've piqued my interest...I wanted to read more, but then you may have to put it in the erotic category. Very good.