by steviet
Sounds like the start of a good adventure. I hope you let her have some more fun.
The usual negative comments have already started to trickle in from the peanut gallery so you know that you have written an exciting short story that should be continued
Whatever happened to the rest? In fact, author made a lot of good starts only not to continue. Our loss.
I loved the story and would like to see you add more chapters to it.