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A Gift from the Heart

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by Anonymous

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by Amyfriend01/26/07

HOT... HOT... HOT

whew...thats certainly panty wetting material.

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by Anonymous01/26/07

should have been a foursome with dad

once again-a story with dad missing.and once again just female bi-and once again-same old same old-as a bi couple story lacks necessary elements

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by Anonymous01/26/07

Very nice ;)

I really liked that story.. Sure, as the guy below says you could have made it a threesome with dad and whatnot, but that's what the story was about, a single mother being lonely and her children seducing her.. It wouldn't have been the same if the father had been around.

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by Sacanaz01/26/07

Could have used a lot more description

You have a great premise here, but you need to slow down, describe the action with much more detail. Give the lovers time to reach orgasms, and tell us how they feel working their way towards them.

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by Otazel01/26/07

Agree and disagree

Yeah, I agree that it was a bit minimalist and would have benefited from a little more description, it raced past a little too quickly for me. But it is a good story well conceived and well told.
But, I strongly disagree with the comment that asked for the husband to be included. That would simply have made it a different story, a tale of incestuous swinging instead of incestuous love and affection. And, as it is, you have a premise that can be explored in many different directions if you care to make a series out of it (hint, hint!).
A very enjoyable read. Thanks

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by Anonymous01/28/07

Why so quick and dry?

Your story and idea had a lot of potential, but falls flat with such a lack of detail. You jump so quickly into undetailed sex, with almost no build-up. This could be excellent if you'd take the time to rework it properly.

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by Anonymous02/14/07

Really Good

Nice Erotic Story, but a bit too short... Sequel?

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by Anonymous06/11/08

we both loved it

my son read this storie to me and then we made love,no not sex, but love as we have for last 15yrs. please more. love ann & allen

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