All Comments on 'Payback'

First story hot and nasty. This one nastier. Can't wait to read what your evil mind writes next. My gf will love your stories.

Ignore those feeble minds that don't know the difference between fantasy and our dull lives.

add more tit action ... nipple sucking and the like ... makes me wet ..

Great start- keep the nastiness and add more detail

no context is built up as to why

she's willing to go the party the next day

So good! I'm so hot after reading that, Fuck, I'd love to be that bitch!

It's just not that good. The details are a little like someone imagined them....anal and rough sex are, well, anal and rough sex. I seriously doubt the author has engaged in either. Sorry, kiddo. The writing gets a B- and the realism is a D.~ Annalee

you don't have to do what your brain can imagine, that's fictional writing. love the way you thought this thru. let us know what you can dream of at the party the next night.

well that was quite a story, full of very descriptive action, one thing I wondered though, is why do some women have all the fun? I would love to be stuffed full of cock, pumping & pounding & punishing my holes, by guys with big throbbing cocks. Want my address LOL!