by MarshAlien
I am looking forward to reading more of your work if it continues to be as good as this first creation. Great Job!
I see this is your first submission,,very well written,,
I hope you continue writing here.. I have a few writers that
I look for their work as I enjoy their style of writting..
I'm hoping to add you to that list..Thanks for the great story.
If this is really your first story I can't imagine how good you will get. The flow of the story, the well defined characters, the interaction among the friends, just wonderful! To anyone that reads this comment, pay attention, we have a winner here! THANK YOU for your efforts. Add a chapter to this one or just write another, do what you want, but please don't make me wait to long for another.
Cute story and fun to read. I hope you write more and will be looking for them.
Sometimes people make the mistake of assuming that a first posting is a rookie writer's initial attempt at putting pen to paper and "encourage" the aspiring scribe to endeavor to persevere. Marsh Alien has posted on another story site (8 stories including this one) since September and all are well-crafted, enjoayble reads.
A very nice story. I hope to see more of your work here. Having written a few stories myself, I did not think that Goin' Fishin' was a first time effort. Now for the next MarshAli9en story.
BTW, welcome to Literotica.
This story was great. It feels good to read about such love and caring these days. Keep up the good work.
Now you have showed the trailer, its time to show the movie and continue the good work that has been approved by so many people, not only me...
Thanks for the post.
Well crafted and entertaining story. You have a knack for realistic characters and quality writing.
This was a fun ride, Marsh. I'm glad I got a chance to read it. Sweet without smarmy. Endearing and charming. It's a wonderful story.
SW
As a man who is still deeply in love after firty years of marriage, I especially enjoyed your story.
... no, on second thought, I'm in love! What a fabulous character. I don't often like stories as sweet as this one; they can so easily be cloying or maudlin. This one isn't. It's so well written; the dialog is smooth and natural; the story is infused with humor, and there was just enough sex to keep it hot. A fine piece of work, written with a light, deft touch. I love it.
Totally drew me in, the characterization is great, and I very much would like to see you continue their story.
Very well crafted writing from someone who obviously cares very much about the written word.
One would think that you might be a romantic at heart...lol. But that's okay...I am too. Loved it. I hope this is not the end for Bill and Jenny. And call me a bit blood thirsty but I think Heather reaped what she sowed. I'll have to check your submissions to see if there is anymore to this story..way to go from one romantic to another.
One of the best romance stories on the site. Funny; great dialogue. Liked it so much I read it twice.
Amazing story, great character development. More comments sent in feedback.
I'm speechless, Marsh. (Not quite true, considering what follows. :D)
What a wonderful, wonderful story. I've read tons of romance novels, and I don't think I've ever come across one that surpasses this one for content. Knowing that you are, *gasp*, a man, makes this tale even better. Phenomenal! I found myself wishing it were longer, but I don't think it's necessary. Wow.
Okay, I'll stop gushing now. Thank you! Had you not entered the How To contest, and subsequently posted in the AH, I'd have never read this story. So, yes, entering the contest was the best thing you've done, from my point of view. At least it was for me. *Kiss* ~Minx
I'm so glad that bitch Heather got to sit there as he proposed to Jenny
Damn! You've got this down pat. That was one of the best romance stories I've read in the past few years, including anything by Jennifer Crusie, Meg Cabot and Janet Evanovich. Turn it into a full length novel and I, for one, would absolutely buy a copy. Congratulations.
Great story. I really enjoyed the characters and way you ended it. I hope you write more in this vein.
have you done this before?!? As a big fan of all kinds of romances, this ranks right up there with some of the best, whether on this site or in print. Keep doing whatever it is you're doin, because the results are wonderful!
Hi,
loved this story! deff a fav!!!!! makes you believe in love everlasting :D
love
lanie
I absolutely loved this story!! deff a fav!
happily ever after does exist! :)
that was lovely!!!!! please do write more of this stuff, you certainly have a knack for it. Congrats!
Loved it, Marsh. Thank you so much!
but I have loved this story since the first time I read it!
Tremendously light and still pulling the heart strings.
I'm in love with this story. It's really sweet and heartwarming. Great job! Please keep up the good work! I look forward to more stories!
What a wonderful story, quick paced, with a surprised. The characters are real, vibrant with a lot of life.
Magnificent. A masterpiece. Dan
I thoroughly enjoyed this story. I really enjoy your style and your sense of humor. I look forward to finding more of your submissions.
Great story. Excellent presentation. Surely you also write professionally. I will be looking for some of your books.
de Jay
Every time I connect to Literotica, I have to read this story. Afterwards, I look over the rest of his list to find something else to read.
I hope that more stories will be forthcoming.
romantic, erotic, entertaining stories I've read on Literotica. I've always enjoyed stories with a happy ending, and you've exceeded my expectations. Thanks for sharing with us.
Especially after discovering this story for the second time and a second read. This is a most enjoyable fantasy/comedy. I still can't figure out how the quality of the characters was so well defined in such a short story. It must be the skill of a very talented writer. Thank you!
Loved the story. Just wished it didn't end quite so quickly. I'd like our main characters to go through a little more effort before they reached the proposal. OR how about some storms coming after the proposal?
Have you ever considered revisiting this story and giving our heros more to conquer before they win the prize?
I couldn't agree less with the previous comment! ITs refreshing to see something work out so well. a little more would be nice, make Heather squirm just alittle more, but its so nice to see a happily ever after!!
That was a most enjoyable story. My only problem was that it ended to soon. Bummer. But thank you for a great read. A 5. Jim ps. its also nice to have none of those anons from LW commenting.
i amm fannning myself...shit...
Every once in a while you come across stories which play out in your head like a movie (a comedy here no doubt..)
I am so so awed by ur writing style..but i still felt like you forgot to post another page of it..
anyway,thank you so much for sharing such an amazing piece of work..we all get to read it free of cost..i'm a big fan..
I am in awe of the quality of this story, truly amazing! I shall be looking for more of your work. R.T.
That alone is worth 5* but the fact that the story is beautiful simply blew it past any amount of stars I could award. Thank you for sharing this with us.
But I don't understand why Marcia stopped Will from asking Jenny out for prom in their junior years?
The ending may be fairly obvious, but a couple more paragraphs ending the story would have been nice.
love your other stories too, love your sense of humour, but this one is my fav
Well developed characters, cute plot, but bad sex. No one likes bad sex. :( humorous and entertaining though
NO! This was not a sex story. It was a love story, and I love it! Well done.
Jerry
Which makes those of us with them in our lives blessed and grateful. The story was written quite well. A little twist in a story always seems sto enhance it and this one is evidence of that.
Thank you
I am old enough and experienced enough to know good literature when I read it. Though I don't normally choose to read many from the "Romance" genre, but in this case, I'm certainly glad that I did.
This is one of the best crafted and best told stories I have read in years. I, too, wish there were a rating high enough to accurately portray my appreciation.
Thank you
again, another wonderfully written love story...by the way, hope elizabeth's story is in the works?
well once again i have read this wonderful story. guess i keep comming back to it because it makes me feel good. once again loved it
I thought your characters were great, and your ability to keep the story interesting was superb. I will be reading more of your work.
Okay, that was hilarious!
I was laughing almost all the way through it, and it left me with a wonderful glow.
Perfect!
I just read a heart-warming romance! And feel better, as a result!
Thank you. (Now I'll go see what other stories you have...)
What did you need? And they all lived happily ever after except Heather? Good story. Well written
This seems to be only the first act of a three act play, the second in which Heather tries to break them up, and the third in which Bill and Jenny reconcile and marry...
One of the all-time great feel-good stories on Literotica. Not too long, not too rushed, and covers all the essential elements of a romance. What more could you ask for? It's just a shame that you can't vote each time you read it! :-)
Just reread the story. Since the last time MarshAlien submitted to this group was in 2008, I wonder if something happened to him. Out of all the authors I have read he is my favorite. In fact to get his "living dolls" story back, I paid for the kindle version.
If anyone knows what happened to him I would appreciate knowing also.
I've now read this story three or four times, and think that it's one of the best short stories I've ever read anywhere. I, too, would love to know what happened to MarshAlien - whatever the answer, his literary legacy will live on (although it would be a shame if it were only on Literotica).
This story warms my heart. I have visited this story so many times - just to get over things.
It helps me- thank you for writing this.
Ever honored and obliged - thank you !
I loved this.... great to see a bit of humor mixed in with a gold digging vixen's comeuppance. I hope you'll add a few more chapters.