All Comments on 'Newlyweds Ch. 01'

by pbidude

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
Mixed up

You got certain part mixed up badly with the her and him. His tongue became her tongue. Good thing you didn't said 'his labia' else I would have freak out. Try to be more careful in future. Do check your work before you submit. Otherwise the story was okay a bit short though.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
actually,

if it's hers, it is also his!, both literally and metaphorically,,, so it's okay!

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