All Comments on 'Charmaine's Infidelity'

Great story!

I've read this story like 10 times since it was posted. I don't know why. It's really a pretty basic story, but good.

Especially the part about the friends finding out but doing nothing, you seem to like that motif, but it works.

Just like the previous poster said, it's one of those stories you can re-read on a rainy day. Clear, concise, and to the point. Smokin hot too. Hot Soup is still my favorite of the two by X-Factor.

X-Factor is missed on this site dearly.

control herself and her actions. Hopefully she will become pregnant and infected with HIV and never speak to her significant other again. She is trash, no rationalization will change that.

Very good. Would have been even better had Rick achieved his goal without either party being under the influence of any drink. Sex is always better when drink isn't involved.

This could have gone on for a few more paragraphs, with Charmaine going back to Danny with her sticky secret inside her

I gave it a 5.

Very good because unlike many of the writers here, you can actually spell and use grammar which are the tools of a writer. Your story is workmanlike in the sense that it's okay. Not bad but not outstanding. First rule of writing is show don't tell and I got the sense that you were relating this in much the way a man would tell a story in the pub. No depth of emotion or feeling. Screaming "I'm cumming" is not emotion and neither cumming nor cum are words.

Basic cum dump slut story

This story is actually another chapter in the compelling and continuing drama of Charmaine. Submitted by an author who truly has a gift with words, this story, good as it is, is even better when read along with the other stories involving her and her main male companion, Danny. Read as a stand alone story, this one is very good; read in the context of the other stories, it is even better, and acquires a deeper meaning, where one can fully understand and appreciate the complex character development of the main characters.