All Comments on 'Never Again, Again'

I believe this version is better than the first one.

Boyd

Sweet little romance, nice and sexy, with a good lesson for married couples. Having read some of your later work, I can see how you've grown as a writer from this beginning. I think all of us who've done a lot of these stories can go back and look at our first few works and see so many ways they can be improved. My personal philosophy, though, is that once it's out, it's done and on to the next story. A few comments about this story. I'd like to see shorter graphs. They give the story more punch. I know some readers like a short, wham-bang story, but I prefer a little more character development. I'd like to see a little more background on why and how John and Karen's sex life started to wane. And I'm not sure what purpose the little squiggly dividers served. They're a distraction unless you have an abrupt change in POV, or a completely new angle to the story that you're introducing, which is not the case here. Here, they interrupt the flow of the story. Those are minor criticisms, however. All in all, this was a very good, very well-written story by a talented writer.

DC:

Glad to re-read some of your earlier work. It is great to compare it with your current stories because it is so obvious and delightful to observe how you have grown and matured as an author. Thank You. Ronnie W.

The original story was good. A quick no frills romantic vignette. This is a fleshed out well rounded Story of lust, love, and life's all too frequent tendency to get in the way of living and loving. Well done!

I couldn't fine "Never Again", so couldn't make a comparison. But this version is professional grade work, Red. Keep it up, girl.

Yeah, I didn't think that through did I? I removed the original. lol. . . Trust me, it was rough. Tense changes and spelling, grammar. Yikes! For an idea of how rough just read some earlier things (Met on the Net) or (Finally His, Finally Hers). Thanks for the great comments guys! It means a lot. I've had a ball writing at Lit.

Nice story. Thanks for writing. While you are working out 'issues' you might get rid of the "cheery lip balm" in the first paragraph and correct "but she could remember" in the second paragraph. I am assuming she could not remember the morning kiss?

I think I would have enjoyed this more if it had been

longer..possibly another session of sex or carried on to the morning and Saturday.. Just too short..

...hope that things are better for you now. Or that they get better. xxx The sex was really nice, too.

This story is one more winner for Red. She has yet to disappoint me. Two thumbs way, way up! Especially loved the ending.

A truly loving wife and she intended to keep it that way.. John's idea of her forgetting her underwear completely could keep their love life on high for quite some time.. Wonderful part of their love.

read the first version, but this version is tremendous Red, yet another super read

Red,

You have provided living proof that you can take an older story and make it better. This story was a pure joy to read. You have certainly develop your craft. A very enjoyable Read.

Perhaps if my first wife had made that effort (instead of crawling into a bottle) we would still be married. But then I would have missed the 35 year with my second (and current) wife and that would have been a catastrophe!

Lynn