All Comments on 'My Naughty Sister Ch. 01'

Not bad, just waaaay too fast and plotless.

not bad but could have used a proof reader or spellcheck. quite a few typo errors

Hot story, could use longer setup. Try using more dialogue rather than tellin what teh characters talk about.

great story. quick and detailed.

A Narrative of sex is not near as interesting as a 'living' first person, 'conversational' account, expressing both the EMOTIONAL and PHYSICAL needs as a reason for their mischief. Did "sister" always admire her brother 'non sexually' before showing off her assets and dressing w/o a bra. Was her desire to entice just anyone (boy or girl) or just to entice her brother? What was her motivation and desire to 'seduce' him (or them)? Was the 'brother' smitten by her sweetness or beauty or helpfulness during his time of trouble or sorrow or perhaps sparked by casual conversations of his previous successful 'victories' with girls or women they both were acquainted with? Was this love or lust? Pure Lust is a lousy and purely selfish substitute for love. Infatuation, although extremely powerful, very seldom lasts for more than 6 or 7 months and in real life, one should never "jump into" another intimate relationship after a break up for at least a year otherwise you wind up making the same mistakes over and over again. Then there is Incest. Incest is a 20,000 year old "Natural Phenomena" that plagued early civilization and there is still that 'desire' hidden somewhere in our genetic makeup but Modern Laws have been created to stop the damage to the next generation. Incest does have physical genetic consequences and should only be handled deliberately and with love not just as

a Hook Up or a Tryst. LUST (familial or not) always turns to hate as soon as the infatuation dies out, usually by one party before the other, thus causing great emotional and psychological challenges. Why do you suppose people who are suppose to "love each other" wind up killing each other?

Your little story made me cum... don't know what more to say. will read all of ur series and comment for each.

My tight little pussy is dripping wet. I made a wet mess everywhere. Mmm.