All Comments on 'Lost a Bet but Won The Prize'

by anaffairtoremember

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
poor

one picture and its illustrated?

shanghaidguyshanghaidguyalmost 17 years ago
Editor needed

Watch your grammar, spelling, punctuation, all detract from reading pleasure.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
grammar

I, you, he, she....pick a person and go with it!! It's very distracting to read a story when the tense and person jumps all around.

bigrimmstalesbigrimmstalesover 16 years ago
don't be put off by the feedback...

...learn from it and get an editor to help you. Behind the grammatical problems lies a fervently erotic mind.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Get an editor

Then get a better storyline that has something clever, original or interesting in it. Because this was just bad.

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