All Comments on 'Loss of Control'

this could have been better with some fleshing out of characters, more drawn out before she gave in and adding more of an element of fear to the story. Not bad for a frist try.

She should've got some fierce, 'claws-out' licks in! Nothing kicks in a man's primal instincts more than having to fight for his keep!

...maybe another chapter to add a bit more depth. But you've got the whole 'where's the rest, dammit!' skill down...

she gave in far to quickly, if i wanted to read a consent story i would

I agree, there should've been more of a struggle.

hot....pity you havent written more