by Mr Thick
It was okay as far as a purely sexual story goes but there isn't that much more effort involved in putting together a plot around the sex. I realize that the sex was the most important thing for you in this story and that's fine but a plot would make it that much more erotic. Additionally you used the word once at least 7 times in this short story. Maybe it's just me but after a few paragraphs it kind of annoyed me. Put a thesaurus next to you when you write. Then when you feel you have used a word more than a few times you can easily get another that fits.
good story sounds just like my wife, she loves to serve black cock like that and i enjoy getting to watch as often as i can, and she enjoys telling me about it when i can not be there, this is something she would go wild to do every week
or more often