All Comments on 'Life Felt Complete'

please tell me that there will be a chapter 2?

Things were pretty good if somewhat predictable. You lost me when he groaned his own name as he shot off inside what is described as a "beautiful woman" Main suggestion is a little more proof reading prior to posting. Keep it up, it gets easier as you go

i really enjoyed this, and especially as your firt submission, you should maybe read over it and change some few errors. But all in all, an enjoyable read. This would be a nice start to a very interesting story. Continuing this would be very worth while. Well done so far.

I loved this story! It was beautifully written and I want to see more! Great Job!!!

"She must not of paid."

This is totally ungrammatical.

She must not HAVE paid.

The contraction in speech of the word "have" ('ve) does not mean "of", although it may sound like it when spoken.