All Comments on 'Private Picnic'

The first paragraph states the picnic was on the FRONT lawn,

turning this unintentionally into an exhibition category piece and I never was able to finish reading it.

This was awkwardly written. It was almost like you took lines from other stories and just pieced them together. The story is cliche and old, which could be find, but you didn't add any new twists to it. Also, it doesn't seem like a front yard is very private.