All Comments on 'I Made A Deal With Me'

by AlexisDarling

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LeBrozLeBrozalmost 17 years ago
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Looks like you started rhyming then gave up on it — a small element that is glaringly obvious. Though the subject matter and direction of thought are sure to resonate well with anyone who's been there.

BOSTONFICTIONWRITERBOSTONFICTIONWRITERalmost 17 years ago
Sad

It was a little sad but I felt your pain. Any poem that makes me feel the writer, in meter or not, out of rhyme or not, is good enough for me.

unapologeticunapologeticalmost 17 years ago
Suggestion

I'd try taking out the rhyme and letting the words flow more like natural language.

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