All Comments on 'Poker Night'

by BradCarson

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Nightowl22Nightowl22almost 17 years ago
A littlw twist there

kinda threw me. Thought something was missing at first. Good little story!

Nightowl22Nightowl22almost 17 years ago
A littlw twist there

kinda threw me. Thought something was missing at first. Good little story!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
Another Mess

<p>When will "writers" learn that stories written in present tense are too awkward to be viable? This mess wasn't terribly imaginative and it was incredibly poorly written. Some of the word images were absolutely appalling. For instance, I have no idea what an “overdue clit” means. Has the warranty run out on the thing – or perhaps it hasn’t been paid for? Whatever – the grammar is terrible, and the dialogue is so incredibly stilted and unrealistic, one wonders if it’s meant to be a satire. Nah, the “writer” isn’t that skillful.</p>

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louguy35louguy35almost 17 years ago
Same Old Stuff.

How much do I detest thee...let me count the ways: cliche...trite...unimaginative...hackneyed...stale...boring...dull...banal...vacuous...humdrum...Just to name a few.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
Wifey is a slut, yes she is.

Hubby is an idiot, yes he is. Good thing they are married. If she was married to someone else she would on the street or dead. If he was married to someone else, he would on the street divorced.

ErotonautErotonautover 12 years ago
Neatly done

Now you see it, now you don't.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
THE STORYLINE WAS BRILLIANTLY CONCEIVED & MASTERFULLY WRITTEN. FIVE-STAR STUFF.

We indirectly follow the wife's stream of consciousness, including what goes on in her fantasy world... we learn that she is sexually frustrated, feels lonely & neglected. She had got a crush on one of her husband's pocker buddies & would fuck him if the opportunity presented itself.

The story reminds me of some art films where you are not sure where the reality stops & the fantasy world starts.

26thNC26thNCover 3 years ago

Whorewife and a gangbang, the only act as low as a gloryhole.

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