All Comments on 'While She Was Sleeping'

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A little imagination would go a long way

I loved the story. Really imaginative and written in a style that took me there. Next time, stay away from the context of anal sex. It's not that common. And after bedding your mom, the pussy itself has become a golden treasure. Really good work

Why not just say that she was naked...or was she wearing a collar? So so story.

"i raped my mommie" should have been the title of this story. that is what you call "sex" and erotic?

I appreciate any and all feedback, whether positive or negative. I had to really stretch my imagination to write this story, but I wanted the challenge. Feel free to hate on it if you think it deserves it, but I'd especially love it if you would give reasons why. My next submission will probably also be from a category I'm not familiar with, but I love tackling new things.

Two quick remarks: it's not rape if the woman is awake and willing the whole time, which the mother in this story was. I thought I made that clear but perhaps not. She only pretended to be out cold to encourage her son.

Also, she was naked from the chest down because her nightgown had raised up while she was tossing in her "sleep." It happens, and I thought it was a nice touch.

I, for one, thought it was actually pretty good. Yes, the storyline was cliched, but it was mostly well done and that's what matters. Not to mention that with the THOUSANDS of incest stories on here, it's pretty hard to write a plot that no one else has written before.

Two things I didn't like: a bit of overuse on the 'Mommy' thing, and the dialogue between mom and son at the end felt off to me. Just my two cents (and that may be inflated pricing...)

But that aside, I liked it. I'd like to see a sequel, though, assuming you know how to write women and the fake uncosciousness was just a plot device for this.

A very good story, I liked the (fake sleep) idea, makes it more interesting. I also would LOVE to see more of this story... OH and BY THE BY, I never saw one word in her thoughts nor heard her mention the words (you RAPED me) hehehe just my observation!! Thanks

You are in a good position to write a sequel,more from the mother would spice up things a great deal.

Good story, nicely done. Was hoping she'd get it in the bum, but next time, eh?

EXTRA ORDINERY SUBMISSION BY THIS AUTHOR! I CAN GIVE 15 OUT OF 10 FOR THIS SUBMISSION. EXCELLENTLY NARRATED AND BEAUTIFULLY COLCUDED. MIND BLOWING WRITING.

K E E P I T O N F O R ME PERTICULARLY!

LUV U

REGARDS

VJAY

Horny old broad that knows what she wants and is sneaky enough to get it. What a lucky son...

An excellent story, by a fine, highly literate teller of hot stories of motherfucking. Here the son has been having stronger and stronger urges to fuck his own mother, as boys normally do as they mature and feel the pressing need to unload their overflowing balls--no place better than up their own mother's ever-loving twat! I love the way the son keeps calling his mother "mommy." It recreates the closest, warmest, most inimate bond any boy or his mother will ever feel. Mom, much more sexually sophisticated than her boy, has planned to have her boy's big fat dick up her hot cunt from the start. Neither of them gives a damn what dad might think--he's abandoned his wife's cunt for his job. Fine, now his son can take over his place between mother's legs, and do a better "job" of it than his father ever did!

I wish he would get her pregnant

pee on her

HILARIOUS

U are a sick mutherfucker dude.

It is disturbing, sickening, dark but very arousing!

No matter how many times I read this story, it is always as great as the last time. These anonymous(s) who read this don't get it that the mother was setting her son up from the first time she changed from hugs to rubs with the booty. Just a good story and I hope someday you finally add more to it!

Loved it. Needs another chapter, though

Wow!!!!

Great story

Can be moved further with sis catching mom n son in fucking act and join in

U have to give us a chapter 2 asap!

I thought it was a very good story. I liked how he thought he was fucking his sleeping mom, but she was awake all the time. I know I could never stay asleep if someone was fucking me, especially if it was my son.

Mary

yes please chapter 2 would be very ravishing and exciting!!! i dont read books but if their where more chapters to this id read the whole damn thing!😍

fake

man i wanna have the same experience

Fake or not it's still an erotic story,and I fingered my sleeping mom when I was 12 and daydreamed about fucking her for years,in the 70s women wore short shorts and let their bush hang out and no bras,your mom or sister is almost always your first real experience with females in the flesh,after sticking all the pages together in your dad's Playboy

I would have pumped her so hard and cum on her feet arch.

I fucked my mom for 6 years, from college until I got married. It was glorious, and never were either of us disappointed, unfulfilled, or regretful. My dad left when I was in high school, and I filled all the voids. We enjoyed ourselves, making sweet love and fucking like animals, depending upon our moods. Great story.

That was good, well done.