All Comments on 'New Kid on the Block Ch. 01'

All I can say is "outstanding!" and "please, please continue!"...

Great start, I just hope it doesn't take long between chapters.

While I do believe this belongs in the "Non-Erotic" section (no actual sex, after all), I do believe that this is the beginning to an great series.

No pressure, of course.

Just please don't wait a month for the next chapter, eh?

"First Time" what? Sorry, while it appears you're a good writer, frankly I am bored so far. Besides not being erotic, your 1-page start leads me to believe that the rest of your submissions will be too short as well. Maybe the overall effect will improve with your next submission.