All Comments on 'Dirty Wife'

You need to make the story much longer and work on your punctuation, commas, periods and such....

I suspect that you have the ability to write really good stories. Unfortunately, this one needs to be edited and re-submitted.

Please pay some attention to your punctuation, from now on.

You may, also, want to consider getting someone to edit your stories, in the future.

Good luck!

I'm sorry that I read this story. It is just as horrible as the other one. All the same comments. Oh, the pain, the pain. Please make it stop. "BANG"!! Cap through my brain box. There, that's better.

She was just the same when I went round your place yesterday.

I took some erotic selfless and arranged to see her next week.