All Comments on 'Shrouded'

Very nicely done. The submission of a maiden to her master has rarely been told so eloquently. Recognizing her "dual fate" (both her submissiveness, and his ownership) if you will, and her growing comfort is very much as I would hope it to be in my maiden. You've even implied a long term role with the mention of his seed. Welcome to lit, and I Look forward to "seeing" you again.

Rape is a product of a sick mind--Enjoyment of a tale of rape is also---The thought that a woman might enjoy being rape is only an excuse.

Real Rape is a crime and should never be condoned but this is a story. If you do not like reading it, what are you doing in this category to start with. I think that it was well written and perhaps a continuation is in order for what happened after.

Ignore the protestor, let him or her get back to the incest category. Very moving, sweetly told.

Great story! It's not easy to write a non-consent/reluctance piece with so much elegance. I loved the quiet passion and eloquence of this story.

Bravo! This is one of the most beautifully written stories I've read in much too long. I agree wholeheartedly that a continence is in order.

An overly-dramatic bit of prose that a created writing prof would mark B+ or better. Perhaps wasted in this site specializing in out-grossing each other for masturbaters seeking a "helper". Good effort, though.

I sincerely appreciate all of your kind words, and the feedback. For the snob who gave be a B+, I can only say that I was nineteen when I wrote this story, and I'm not sure that someone who can't spell the world "weird" should be handing out literature grades. Also, please tell me where I can find a "created writing" class. I am obviously in need of assistance.

To the rest of you, your support means more than I can say. I will try to write more soon. I've been away for far too long.